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What Am I
Contributed by
cheech
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Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:21:17 PM in AEST
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what am i?
am i just a piece?
what am i?
someone who cannot realease?
what am i?
am i something?
what am i?
am i anything?
what am i?
am i destroyed?
what am i?
can i be annoyed?
what am i?
just another pretty face?
what am i?
someone who no one can raise?
what am i?
am i like you?
what am i?
am i through?
what aren't i?
aren't i a nice person?
what aren't i?
aren't i me with action?
what aren't i?
aren't i always there?
what aren't i?
aren't i always fare?
what can i be?
can't i just be me?
what can i be?
can't i be someone who can see?
what can i be?
can't i understand?
what can i be?
can this be planned?
you all ask,what are you
but i'm me and thats true
i'm me and i don't know what to do
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Re: What Am I
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by Stonedraider23 on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:46:38 PM AEST
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| what are you hmmm well p h a t works Pretty Hott And Tempting thats what u r and a piece hmmmm i dunno id like the whole thing:P good write |
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Re: What Am I
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by Thegirlwithsolittle on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:50:29 PM AEST
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| i dont know what it is but it makes perfect sense. i really hope yo keep up all the good work, maybe you can read and comment on the poem called her savior...i think you might like it. |
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Re: What Am I
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by wray on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:50:45 PM AEST
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| Interesting, you've left me pondering too haha. But all the question marks gave me a bit of a headache... maybe you could try varying the style a bit. |
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Re: What Am I
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 09:17:20 PM AEST
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| well to be honest you had an excellent concept but you overused words to portray it. you dont need to repeat the same words over to get the point across. i just think repeating stifles creativity in most cases. why say it the same exact way over and over, when you can do it many other ways. other than that i liked this. good questions. |
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