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Suicide
Contributed by
Elayner27
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Monday, 13th December 2004 @ 08:30:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The thought I fall asleep to.
The thought I wake up to.
I thought I dream about.
The thought I think about,
All day in school.
All day after school.
All day before school.
Its my favorite thought of the day.
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Elayner27
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2004-12-13 20:30:59]
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Re: Suicide
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by Luinil on
Monday, 13th December 2004 @ 08:32:48 PM AEST
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| the repetition says a lot-- nice writing* |
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Re: Suicide
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by LEMMEN on
Monday, 13th December 2004 @ 08:34:51 PM AEST
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This thought may it never become reailty.
Well written.
~DENNIS~ |
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Re: Suicide
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by BabyFacedAngel2010 on
Monday, 13th December 2004 @ 09:22:25 PM AEST
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I understand your pain i feel the same everyday as well...
Read some of mine
BabyFacedAngel2010
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Re: Suicide
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 13th December 2004 @ 09:45:06 PM AEST
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i agree with luinel, but i think that it would be better if it had more substance for the repetitions. or just written a different way with what you have there already. the words for rhymes are overused, and the format was broken.
but is there a reason not to think any of this?
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Re: Suicide
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by Spazzo on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:58:39 PM AEST
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I can really relate to this. Suicide isn't the answer. I have attempted it twice before. Not sooo long ago either. I have come to realize it's not the answer, life isn't worth the pain suicide brings, it hurts yourself, what if you wanted to change your mind? You couldn't. And it hurts others, believe me there are people out there that care. I care. I hope you are doing better now.
Scott |
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