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The Forgotten Me
Contributed by
Luka
on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 09:57:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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the crack on the wall
represents the crack in my heart
intence but small
its where i fall apart
the light outside
is lit at night
so i can hide
my childish fright
for i am no longer me
my days have expired
i have changed cant you see
im no longer the one you desired
the blood on my hands
is from the forgotten me
and the anger expands
but its just a poor mans last plea
Copyright ©
Luka
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2004-12-10 21:57:05] (Date/Time posted on
site)
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Re: The Forgotten Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:03:15 PM AEST (User
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powerful and expressive write. |
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Re: The Forgotten Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by greeneyes on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:25:28 PM AEST (User
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I think you did very well in writting this.
Nancy |
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Re: The Forgotten Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by DesolantDreamer on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:38:31 PM AEST (User
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I agree with Essentially9...It is very powerful...It's short but gets the point across...keep up the good work!
Ja Ne!
-Tsubaki |
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Re: The Forgotten Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by DesperateSoul on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 02:42:23 AM AEST (User
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Very emotional and written well!!! Thanks for sharing!!! JKeep writing and keep posting always!! D.$. |
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Re: The Forgotten Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by wolfman on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 03:39:10 PM AEST (User
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this was a powerfuly short poem and it saddend my heart. I do hope that you find the self you lost or at lest make peace with who you are.
it was very well writen and very expressev emotionaly
pleas keep writing and keep up the good work. |
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