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Left Broken
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 07:03:35 PM in AEST
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Left Broken
A part of me is missing
Yet I keep on living
I'm never to be whole
Without this piece to my soul
As I'm growing older
I realize I'm getting colder
And my heart is frozen
Until it's left broken
I've never had the piece
That many think they need
A father is a part of them
While I'll never see mine again
I was left unwanted
And discarded
You have been blessed
And yet you forget this
You take what I've always wanted
And take him for granted
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Re: Left Broken
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by Jenn2004 on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 07:19:19 PM AEST
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| Great Poem, i feel like a part of me is missing too. |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Jenn2004 on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 07:21:46 PM AEST
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| Good Poem, i feel broken too. |
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Re: Left Broken
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by autumngreeneyes on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 07:29:04 PM AEST
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| I understand what you're saying..but my son has three kids and he's a..real ass hole..they'd be better off if they didn't know him..they cry themselves to sleep knowing they have such a wretch for a dad.. |
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Re: Left Broken
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by DesolantDreamer on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 07:36:40 PM AEST
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| I know that feeling....before my momma's death, my Chichi never even wrote to me. He walked away from momma the day she wen't into labor...I knew nothing of him until those shimata atama at the American justic system sent me to him. But he isn't so bad.... |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Stitch on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 09:02:32 PM AEST
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I have felt this. The numb feeling that you will never truly feel again.
Introspective and broad write.
Stitch |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Doriens_Picture on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 09:44:29 PM AEST
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| I love my dad and sometimes do feel ilke i take him for granted |
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Re: Left Broken
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by emystar on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 11:02:38 PM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
so sorry for your loss.
Great writing and great point.
luv, huggs,
emy
both my parents a gone but I cherished them when they were alive. |
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Re: Left Broken
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by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 01:18:23 AM AEST
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aww this is sad.. im in awe!! awesome write..
peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: Left Broken
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by pixie on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 06:59:16 AM AEST
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wow that was deep and sad, written from your heart, great poem,
pixie xx |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 10:32:34 PM AEST
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Aww Jen..sad write..but well done..
Jenni |
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Re: Left Broken
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by cheech on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 10:33:57 PM AEST
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aww,i can relate to this 1,i know what its like,remember the first time u commented on any of my stuff,well i think it was u,anyways,u told me not to blame my problems on my dad,so i know where ur comen from,i'm not trying to hurt u in anyway shape or form,but if u dont mind me asken,who took him for granted?u got me wondering now and its almost midnight,i'm gonna be up all night trying to figure this 1 out,well anyways great write,i loved it,muh & hug
keep up the great job
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Re: Left Broken
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by Red_October on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 01:56:17 PM AEST
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| I like what you put into this poem... And with age it seems the best parts of us harden on the outside to survive. Nice poem. Tiffany J. (Red_October) |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 07:10:35 AM AEST
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I was left unwanted
And discarded
You have been blessed
And yet you forget this
You take what I've always wanted
And take him for granted
These lines really affected me. I have my father, but we have never had the relationship I hoped for, and I'm only just now accepting that without tears. I understand this though. We all have precious things we take for granted.
Stitch |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Rottenrioter on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:35:00 PM AEST
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| beatiful |
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Re: Left Broken
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by weezer21 on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 02:13:43 PM AEST
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awesome write...i always feel like a part of me is missing....but sometimes it really is better to have no dad then to have one that beats you or is an alcholic or does drugs and doesn't care you know? great write
-XX jESS XX- |
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Re: Left Broken
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by Scarlett on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 04:23:16 AM AEST
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this was moving, am sorry for your pain and can relate. at the end of the day though, everyone takes for granted what they have, there may be someone reading who can't walk or can't talk and we all take it for granted that we can just get up or speak.
we are all blessed in our own ways x |
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Re: Left Broken
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 11:05:08 PM AEST
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Yes Jen...can't really say I know the feeling, but I feel the ache in your heart from every line...Great post..as always..
Clark |
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Re: Left Broken
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by midian on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 07:44:01 AM AEST
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| A Truly Powerfull poem, that many can find they relate to. i sincerly felt the hurt from this poem and the unwantedness once again a fantastic poem as i have come to expect from you! |
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