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just a moment longer.....
Contributed by
justjonesy
on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 04:23:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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if you listen.....
just a little closer
and if you would stay.....
just a moment longer
You might be able to hear
these drops of regret
fall into the bucket
And you might be able to see
these drops of sweet "sorry"
filling up the bottle
I told myself this is
no fault of my own
and blamed it on your fear
of being alone
but if I bring you.....
just a little closer
and if I could hold you.....
just a moment longer
I might be able to take back
those drops of regret
and empty that bucket
And I might be able to soak up
those drops of sweet "sorry"
and break open that bottle
We made this fairy tale
into a very short story
You deserved a much better ending
and for this.....
I am very very sorry.....
Copyright ©
justjonesy
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2004-12-10 04:23:39]
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Re: just a moment longer.....
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 04:29:40 AM AEST
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| Beautifully tender and composed with such compassion and feeling...awesome poem. |
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Re: just a moment longer.....
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by pixie on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 05:11:36 AM AEST
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sad and a very deep write,you defenatly write from the heart,
pixie xx |
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Re: just a moment longer.....
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by girish on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 05:54:09 AM AEST
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very good write
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Re: just a moment longer.....
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by Spike on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 12:43:47 AM AEST
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I really enjoyed this one, and read it a few times. A plaintive, regretful poem but one written so well that it is not overly bitter or maudlin. Most excellent.
Spike |
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Re: just a moment longer.....
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by Jenn2004 on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 08:41:29 PM AEST
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| Beautiful Poem, thanks for commenting on mine!!! |
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Re: just a moment longer.....
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by girltranscended on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 02:01:54 PM AEST
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We made this fairy tale
into a very short story
You deserved a much better ending
and for this.....
I am very very sorry.....
Anyone who relates to this- must just deeply ache here, an inner understanding, the unspoken regret we carry and live with like an old memory (that will never fade) that we only take out once in awhile.
Another great write!
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