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For all the times I tried
Contributed by
Kitty_cat
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Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 02:05:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Trying to impress you with my dress
Trying to dazzle you with my smile
Trying to make you think I'm sorta pretty
Hoping it will all be worthwhile
Trying to turn you on with my body
Trying to shine out from the rest
Trying to make you see we belong
Make you see I suit you best
Trying to strike you with my beauty
Trying to astound you with my eyes
Trying to electrify you with my chest
Wishing feelings will soon arise
Trying to amaze you with my words
Trying to stun you unaware
Trying to make you realise our connection
Know of the chemistry we share
Trying to overwhelm you with it's perfume
Trying to catch you in love's trap
Trying to seize and clasp your heart
To fill my hollow soul's gap
Trying to make you see me as me
Trying to make you need me near
Trying to make you whisper softly
Those words I long to hear
Trying to make you return the emotions
Awaiting that amazing day
When you will smile and look at me
In that dazed, loving way
Trying to help you want me, need me
But you will never relieve my plea
Ive been trying so long to make you fonder
Now theres no point in trying any longer
But I will continue to strive to make you mine
Will continue to worship you, my shrine
As my love for you eats me from the inside
For all those times I tried and tried
Copyright ©
Kitty_cat
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2004-12-08 14:05:49]
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Re: For all the times I tried
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by CrimsonTears on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 02:12:38 PM AEST
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i can relate to this poem so well....excellent write....great job
Lots of Love
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Re: For all the times I tried
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by in2thetwilightzone2 on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 02:13:43 PM AEST
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this is a beautiful piece
i especially like the opening paragraph:
Trying to impress you with my dress
Trying to dazzle you with my smile
Trying to make you think I'm sorta pretty
Hoping it will all be worthwhile
i can really relate,
i think your rhyming scheme is brilliant, it's fantastic and it dosnt even cheapen the poem, it just gives it emotional rythm.
i really enjoyed reading it!!!!!!!! thx!!!!!
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Re: For all the times I tried
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by Mesano on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 03:10:16 PM AEST
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wonderful poem, i really enjoyed reading it... although i have never quite been in that situation, i can see how people could easily relate to it
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Re: For all the times I tried
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by catharinep on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 03:54:46 PM AEST
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| I really like this poem, although it is sad. For all the 'trying' I hoped succession followed, somehow. |
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