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A strange morning's poem
Contributed by
zenmind
on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 01:18:42 PM in AEST
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sleeping soundly,
I drank through my skull this morning,
a young trampled buck.
Over my eyes I could only see black,
and my ears felt like rumbles.
I sat up a staired out the window,
into the cold, street rising.
People flipping dollar coins into the air,
landing in sewer and homeless buckets.
I saw a man trembling,
fumbling for change,
spitting on the ground, handcuffed.
A maniacal laugh, a crimson scream.
I woke the neighbor.
"Shut up!" she says
"Stop yapping your wank!
I'm trying to get drunk here!"
I spat on the floor with a distained fragrance,
and I opened with window,
to fall through.
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2004-12-08 13:18:42]
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Re: A strange morning's poem
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by In2thetwilightzone on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 01:22:46 PM AEST
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| yes i agree with you!!!!!!! xxxxxxxxxxxxxx |
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Re: A strange morning's poem
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by DarkInTheWater on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 01:55:43 PM AEST
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| It was good, very good, but quite hard to understand... |
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Re: A strange morning's poem
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 03:50:25 PM AEST
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INCREDIBLE!!! These words you wove so effortlessly have struck me silent, Zenmind... All that flows through my mind is: Perfect. More words when they form and are suitable to submit! Loved it!!!! Forever,
Your friend,
Fleur de bonheur. *Stephy* |
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Re: A strange morning's poem
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by Ina on
Thursday, 9th December 2004 @ 12:22:48 AM AEST
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Yo babe this was the best poem I have read by you so far. I will probably say that a dozen times more as I read more of your poetry, but take that as a super duper compliment. YEs? I love how you analyze my poetry, and tie things together, and tell ME what I was probably writing. It's so great. You are inflating my ego, my friend...its t h i s big now.
got your messagw ill respond when I am not being haunted by the psychology book on my lap and the final tomorrow at 11 am. Brrr.
...to
f
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th ro ugh
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hmmm, thats the image i got, not of a falling cray sarcastic boy (geez you are a boy right?)
but of words, falling letters.
night.
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