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Your Space
Contributed by
Broken_Wingz
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Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 05:48:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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I'm sorry that things have come to this
but surely you must see,
I have given all I can to you,
although you've given nothing to me.
I know I may sound selfish
but what more can I say?
If you cannot return the favours
then I am leaving here today.
You're supposed to be my best-friend
but you have no idea why.
Just that thought alone
makes me want to cry.
How can you know so little
about a friend you've known so long?
How can you manage to keep taking
when everything is gone?
You're a very greedy person,
it's always you, you, you , you ,you!
Well, what about the things I want?
What am I supposed to do?
I don't need you to buy me anything
altough I've spent a lot on you.
Maybe you should listen
and offer advice on what to do.
So can you do that for me?
Open up your ears?
Or maybe open up your eyes
and look at all my tears.
There is someone else in this relationship
and yes that person is me.
Or are you too busy with yourself
to even stop and see?
Maybe we should go our ways
and you'll have your own space.
But being there without a friend
will be a very lonely place.
Copyright ©
Broken_Wingz
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2004-12-08 05:48:34]
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Re: Your Space
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 05:56:27 AM AEST
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such deep emotions, this is very sad, *hugs*
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Re: Your Space
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 06:12:48 AM AEST
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That, my friend, was heartbreaking. Such honest and raw emotion.
Very well done
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Re: Your Space
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by autumngreeneyes on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 10:38:58 AM AEST
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I loved the rhyme and the flow..and the whole poem..well..it is kind of sad...but the first stanza? It sounds a tiny bit off.. and if you use the word naught instead of nothing I think it might flow better.. maybe?
just a thought..hope you don't mind..
I'm sorry that things have come to this
but surely you must see,
I have given all I can to you,
although you've given naught to me.
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