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I knew her, once.
Contributed by
SuicideParty
on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 08:22:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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I know a woman
She tells me stories of home
I don’t ask her why
And this one woman
She loves like she’s dying soon
I worry for her
I’ve known a woman
Who hid her tears when she cried
She would not dry them
I miss that woman
In my mind, she’s everywhere
Extraordinary
I knew a woman
But I took her for granted
Now she’s gone for good
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2004-12-07 20:22:01]
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Re: I knew her, once.
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 08:28:58 PM AEST
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Tis a good write...never did understand what haiku was about even though many have tried to explain....
I liked this poem though well written and tenderly composed...excellent write. |
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Re: I knew her, once.
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 08:40:03 PM AEST
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Beautiful! Most of the time, I read haikus and notice immediately that they're haikus because the necessary syllable amounts make the lines jerky and awkward, but I honestly didn't realize these were haikus till I saw your comment because it flows so naturally and comfortably. Wonderful job- very eloquent, touching, emotional poem and the haiku pattern is well done :).
keep it up,
Nora |
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Re: I knew her, once.
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 08:41:40 PM AEST
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| great haiku. you stuck to format of 5/7/5. not many people can pull that off. |
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Re: I knew her, once.
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 01:13:49 AM AEST
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| wow, awesome, well done!! |
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