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The Pain
Contributed by
Flicker
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Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 12:18:46 PM in AEST
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EmotionalPoetry
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No one knows the pain i'm in
The pain is inside me,the pain is within
I can't escape it,nor it can not escape me
I'm just now starting to see what it's done to me
The pain in my life is so hard to describe
I dont listen to what the docter's perscribes
I dont know why my life is like it is
I dont even get a goodnighht kiss
My brother is gone,and my dad is too
I dont even have a sister named Sue
I try to escape the pain in my life,
but it's so hard because it holds a knife
The knife is to my heart about to go through
I dont want it broken so what should I do?
I have problems in my life that I can't explain
If I told someone about it they would call me insane
I'm gonna get rid of this pain,it's gonna stop and see The End
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Flicker
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2004-12-05 12:18:46]
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Re: The Pain
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by DesolantDreamer on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 01:35:58 PM AEST
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| An amazing aray of words. It tantalizes me. It is short and emotional. I can see every twist of hurt and every death expirianced. It is one of the best poems I have read. I can feel the pain as if it was I that it all happened to. You have great voice. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: The Pain
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by DesolantDreamer on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 01:36:18 PM AEST
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An amazing aray of words. It tantalizes me. It is short and emotional. I can see every twist of hurt and every death expirianced. It is one of the best poems I have read. I can feel the pain as if it was I that it all happened to. You have great voice. Keep up the good work.
-Tsubaki |
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Re: The Pain
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by In2thetwilightzone on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 01:37:30 PM AEST
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My brother is gone,and my dad is too
I dont even have a sister named Sue?
you need to work on your poem, good intention
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Re: The Pain
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by faffeee on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 05:44:03 PM AEST
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| remember that if anyone ever calls you insane, its cos they dont get it...honestly, there are people that will understand the things you're going through...in fact you are likely to find someone here on this site, where people go through so much...if you have pain, tell someone you can trust...im always open to listening if you want to pm me. good poem :) katie xx |
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Re: The Pain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 10:48:23 PM AEST
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| Great poem. It had a nice flow. I like your style of writing. |
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