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An Angel Fell
Contributed by
Doriens_Picture
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Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 11:27:56 PM in AEST
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I have seen an Angel tonight
She was the most beautiful sight I have ever seen
No sunset or sunrise could ever compare to her
She had this long red hair that gave off glow with any light
Her smile drove me insane for a while and brought me back
And her eyes still have me trapped and I do not want to escape
But she lets me go with the tears that ran down her face
She wore a dark gown that was a shade of blood red
And behind her were these long black angel like wings
That I swear to you can envelope the earth and every one in it
She was bleeding from her wrist none stop and that scared me
So I went to her and bound her wounds and she thanked me
She told me that you she had to cut her self to fall and be with me
She has been following me for sometimes now and I was just
So amazed that she had even noticed me she is so perfect
I am humbled by her and her magnificence
Then I asked her why and asked her name
It was Danielle I name that I so love
I hid her wings and took her home with me
And on the way she stated to cry
I asked her why she was crying and she said
That she was just happy to be with me
So I dressed her in my arms and she fell asleep
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by emystar on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 11:41:27 PM AEST
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Hey now,
You know this is good.
It's tender, beautifull, caring and a masterpeice.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by LittleMANof04 on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 11:45:53 PM AEST
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| well, it's certainly not bad. It's only bad if you think it is or someone much smarter than me says so. Great attention to details. i loved the description. |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 11:47:39 PM AEST
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| Really beautiful poem, very visual and sad..yet with an awesome ending...this poem rocked...keep the words flowing...they are so mezmerising. |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 11:47:54 PM AEST
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| i seem to like all the poems you dont like. ironic eh? |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by little_genna on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 04:24:08 AM AEST
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John DUDE what are you on this is a great poem!
When i read it a few days ago it was good,
But now you have added the details its amazing!
u shouldnt be so hard on ur skills as a writer....
Take care babes
Love
Stace xx |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 04:59:48 AM AEST
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Bravo!!! this is such a fab write, very beautifully writen by a real poet.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by pixie on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 07:37:11 AM AEST
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you wrtie the most beautiful poems I have ever read this is lovely,
pixie xx |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 08:54:40 AM AEST
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| Quite exquisite what..this piece...but I hav eto ask...ha ha ha does it hurt....when you fall to earth... a question for the angel of course...ha h aha |
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Re: An Angel Fell
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by Luka on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 11:15:57 PM AEST
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| nice, i dont know why you dont liek this poem that one line really pulls the reader in "She told me that you she had to cut her self to fall and be with me" try adding some rythem, or ryhming, i dont think it flowed right, but thats just my opnion, and im just a dip***** 17 yearold kid....lol |
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