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The Rose
Contributed by
FlawlessMistake
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Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 04:09:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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A tear drips off the end of my nose,
I hurt inside once again.
My love is like a single dead rose,
Waiting for new life to begin.
For early in the spring,
The buds will blossom once more,
And this single dead rose will have to calmly wait for,
The crack of the thunder,
The taste of new rain,
To wash away all of the past pain,
Old is gone,
In with the new,
As my tears wash away,
My memories
Of you.
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FlawlessMistake
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2004-12-03 16:09:45]
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Re: The Rose
(User Rating: 1 )
by bonita2689 on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 04:12:04 PM AEST
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| Beautifully written and solemn poem |
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Re: The Rose
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by Stitch on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 04:46:59 PM AEST
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The last four lines are the best.
I wouldn't cap every line. Break it up by capping the ones that begin a new thought.
Don't say "all of" when all the past pain is sufficient and correct.
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