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let me be your inspiration too
Contributed by
in2thetwilightzone2
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Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:12:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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if i do not make mistakes,
i know i am not taking risks,
if i am not learning,
i know i am not enduring the lesson,
if i am not hurting,
i know there is no pain,
but without pain you cannot slice the surface,
and if you do not slice the surface, you cannot heal, and if you do not heal, you wont create new skin, and so, i will not grow.
i realise love is a strong word,
a word that only god can put to my lips,
if there is only one soulmate for everyone,
why does it always garuantee they are of the opposite sex if you are straight?
if you cut 50% of the world away,
then what do you have left,
the second piece of the jigsaw puzzle,
and who is to say you two are in the same picture?
i realise now that i may never have him,
and i write with tears in my eyes,
he is my inspiration,
he is the one i believe i need,
i want to paint him,
as he is,
i want him to see me,
as i am,
i want him to realise that i,
i am the piece missing in the jigsaw,
the colour missing in the tray,
i am the warm cup of coffee on a bitter day,
i am the red white and blue,
'i am the dark side of the moon,
i am the ships crew,
i am the flow from your writers block,
let me be your inspiration too...
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Re: let me be your inspiration too
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by MMISS on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:17:13 PM AEST
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| great wrting! i love the story. you are a poet. |
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Re: let me be your inspiration too
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by zenmind on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:31:36 PM AEST
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Wow, I am impressed. This is well written, full of insight, and definitely full of emotion. I could tell you had tears in your eyes. This poem is a success.
if i do not make mistakes,
i know i am not taking risks,
if i am not learning,
i know i am not enduring the lesson,
if i am not hurting,
i know there is no pain,
but without pain you cannot slice the surface,
and if you do not slice the surface, you cannot heal, and if you do not heal, you wont create new skin, and so, i will not grow.
This is awesome. It shows that you have a lot of insight here. I like your attitiude, because you realize that life is pain, and you need to experience this pain in order to learn and grow. You are expressing a level of acceptance, that is necessary to possess, throughout life, because life will always be difficult. There are always lessons to learn. There is always room to grow. And I love how you meantioned that you need to create new skin. This expresses your willingness to change, and to flow along with life.
I know that you must be feeling a lot of pain now. It's obvious that you are because of the way you were writing about this boy. I know it doesn't help much to say this, but just remember that if you are meant to be with him, then you will be with him. Everything happens as it is supposed to happen. And maybe if you aren't with him, then you are actually allowing yourself to wait to be with the person you are supposed to be with. Love doesn't always have to be expressed romantically. Maybe you guys could share a meaningful relationship without that aspect. But then again, I do not know your situation, and I am not you, so I am not exactly sure how you are feeling, so take these words as a grain of salt.
Be true,
zenmind |
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Re: let me be your inspiration too
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by Summerwine on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:37:39 PM AEST
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| What wonderful insight you have to realize that inspiration whether it is spiritual or physical is is a necessary piece in this puzzle called life... |
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Re: let me be your inspiration too
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by in2thetwilightzone2 on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:42:04 PM AEST
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yes, i believe inspiration is as important as a poets pen/keyboard. i feel lucky to have such inspiration. especially at my age. (13) whilst other kids are out getting drunk, i am writing down my inspirations
thankyou all for your support, you all have a friend in me, i wish you luck along your journey
jazz
jazz13697@hotmail.com
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Re: let me be your inspiration too
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by sunshiny on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 03:05:45 PM AEST
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| I really like how this poem affects me. I also love the last line. You put a lot of emotion into your poetry or maybe I can just feel it better than some I have read. Thank you for sharing! |
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Re: let me be your inspiration too
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by TheRaven on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 11:54:57 AM AEST
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wow...truly a great poem. you have some awesome talent from what i've read so far.
the first stanza and the last two lines just reverberated in my heart after reading them. excellent job, keep it up...
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