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THE ONE
Contributed by
karmen
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Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 12:36:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You are so many things to me,
a priceless gift in you I see.
Where I am the earth in a fantasy,
you'd be the sun stars and sea.
You'd be the very air I breathe,
autumns many colored leaves.
You'd be the grass in the velvet green,
a sunlights twilight colored scheme.
You'd be the rain racing down,
the way that thunders crashing sound,
you'd be the moonlight hitting the ground.
The shadows that dance forever around,
you'd be the first hint of spring.
The melody when the angels sing,
the brilliance of a diamond ring.
You'd be my every summers fling,
you are the world to me.
Every beautiful thing I see,
the very thoughts that make me smile.
A reason for every step,
in every mile.
You glitter like gold.
As bright as the sun,
you are now and everyday "the one".
Copyright ©
karmen
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2004-12-03 12:36:56]
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Re: THE ONE
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by in2thetwilightzone2 on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 12:38:48 PM AEST
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| that is brilliant karmen, a wonderfull job |
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Re: THE ONE
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by Overstated on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 12:41:59 PM AEST
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this is a lovely poem Karmen, you i've put together a real treat of a poem...
feel free to comment on mine too.. |
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Re: THE ONE
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 03:44:11 PM AEST
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Well written. You stumbled over these lines
"you'd be the moonlight hitting the ground.
The shadows that dance forever around,"
where I thought it should have kept its consistency . . .
Keep rhyming. You're good at it. |
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