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manifest loneliness
Contributed by
atreyuskye
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Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 11:21:43 AM in AEST
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loneliness and dread
has finally manifested
you're gone
i made you go away
even though i didn't want to
it is the best thing for me and you
happiness has fled
my body
my soul
im dead
i wake up at night
i reach for you
no one is there
nothing
not even a silhouette
i sit up
my sweat and tears mingle together
i ponder
my thoughts wonder
my emotional puzzle is solved
all emotions will come into alignment
when you come back to me
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atreyuskye
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2004-12-03 11:21:43]
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Re: manifest loneliness
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by kitty_girl on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 11:28:07 AM AEST
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i enjoyed your poem but are u dead?
please read some of mine
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Re: manifest loneliness
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by kitty_girl on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 11:28:10 AM AEST
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i enjoyed your poem but are u dead?
please read some of mine
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Re: manifest loneliness
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by kitty_girl on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 11:28:12 AM AEST
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i enjoyed your poem but are u dead?
please read some of mine
kitty_girlxxx |
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Re: manifest loneliness
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by atreyuskye on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 12:21:27 PM AEST
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| im glad you enjoyed it. sometimes i feel dead. i get depressed sometimes |
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Re: manifest loneliness
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 03:31:42 PM AEST
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I wasn't going to read it and leave. I was going to read it and then read another, but then I thought about this comment and . . . well, you get the picture--
However, I don't really get this picture you painted. Its abstracted by the line
"when you come back to me"
You didn't explain to me fully if the person in question would be willing to go back - would she? Is this possible? I was left confused.
Just some thoughts. I liked your rhymes, though.
keep writing. |
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