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I want you to hit me
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 11:49:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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As bright the star of morning gleams/
So Jesus sheddeth.../
I want you to hit me
To bloody my nose
Let my eyes drain of blood
So I can scream out enraged
A monsterous noise
And dissolve into sugary saltwater tears
A wafer washed into a glass
...
...The Angels' song/
Christ the King is Born/
I want you to hit me
To bloody my nose
So I can scream out enraged
A monsterous noise
Did they know one day men would cry/
Cru-u-u-u-ci-fy/
Cru-u-u-u-ci-fy/
Christ the King is Born
...The Angels' song/
I want you to hit me
To bloody my nose
Let my eyes drain of blood
Eight eight
Six six
So I can scream out enraged
Eight eight
Six Six
A monsterous noise
Eight Eight Eight
Six Six Six Six
And dissolve into sugary saltwater tears
A wafer washed into a glass
...
As bright the star of morning gleams/
So Jesus sheddeth glorious beams/
...
Christ the King is Born/
...
So I can scream out enraged
And dissolve into sugary saltwater tears
A wafer washed into a glass
Eight eight
Six six
Eight eight
Six six
Let my eyes drain of blood
And dissolve into sugary saltwater tears
A watermark.
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2004-12-02 11:49:49]
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Re: I want you to hit me
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by MMISS on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 12:18:59 PM AEST
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| beautiful! emotional also. makes a person think |
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Re: I want you to hit me
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 01:16:00 PM AEST
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Your love of God is screamingly obvious here. I know He moved you to write this. It's moving and full.
Stitch |
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Re: I want you to hit me
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by faith_my_eyes on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 04:05:26 PM AEST
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| nice scope- you rendered his birth and death here well |
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Re: I want you to hit me
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by lifefliesby on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 05:25:12 PM AEST
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umm, k... ?
it Is a wonderfully done poem
I don't the Concepts of the ideas but you describd them very well...
an excellent write in the right state of mind
and remember, I'm always near; if you need ANYTHING...
I love you Chelsea,
Jared |
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Re: I want you to hit me
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 03:45:49 PM AEST
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Intense. You never cease to amaze me with your creativity. You show your intense love through an anger voice...and it was indeed effective. It was a poem I had to read more than once to even get a true glimpse of all the emotion I'm sure that you put into it. Amazing, heartfelt. Very enjoyable. Superb....okay, I'm done.
~Carrie~ |
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