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That Terrible Room
Contributed by
bruised_hands08
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Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 05:45:40 PM in AEST
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i think he stopped caring a long time ago.
i think i stopped searching when ice turned to snow.
i think i stopped breathing that very same day...
when he made up his mind and he just walked away.
i wanted to stop him, keep him by my side.
instead i just lost it, i broke down and cried.
when i think of our love, i try to be strong.
but his heart had been black for so very long.
i don't believe there was even a chance.
we fell right apart on that very last dance.
in the small cozy room where we sat and we cried.
in the terrible room where love wilted and died.
his eyes were so empty... the blueness had gone.
but somehow they called me, they sang me a song.
i wanted to keep him, but he walked away.
and my heart is still broken to this very day.
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Re: That Terrible Room
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 05:54:37 PM AEST
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| Wow. I am so sorry. But one day soon, there will come another guy,whos eyes sing you a song so wonderful, you know you are meant to be. |
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Re: That Terrible Room
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by EternalNight4x on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 05:54:47 PM AEST
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| excellent poem, very sad and emotional...well expressed keep on posting |
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Re: That Terrible Room
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by Unheard_Mute on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 05:57:23 PM AEST
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| wow... just... wow. I really liked this poem, it was very deep, very touching, very sad... I know that's what everyone says, but these are the only words that can describe how much I liked this poem... |
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Re: That Terrible Room
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 08:03:05 PM AEST
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wow this is soo sad...im sorry for your pain but it resulted in a n excellent poem....great job
Lots of Love
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Re: That Terrible Room
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by juliette on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 10:32:03 PM AEST
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Love is such a twisted emotion isn't it? Here today, gone tomorrow - forever haunting. So often we women do carry hearts forever broken........leaves me to wonder if they might too........not that we'll ever know....
Beautiful, sad write. Awesomely written. Thanks for sharing!
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Re: That Terrible Room
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by bruised_hands08 on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 07:12:11 AM AEST
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| Wow... thank you guys so much for responding so wonderfully to my poetry. I haven't gotten this many comments (in this short of time) ever! While I do admit that this is not my best work, I am very greatful that it touched you all. I just really wanted to say thanks for supporting me, I had almost given up on people enjoying my work. The funny thing is: this is not my favorite. :) Anyways, thanks. |
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