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Vivid Tangerine
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 04:03:08 PM in AEST
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A fright too sentimental but I've got to say I see;
Your person is so gentle like a warm, sweet cup of tea.
To sit just by a fire place as embers form and glow
In colors that, too frames your face. Discussing poem or prose.
I've more such wish of days to come than strength to be so bold
As to tiptoe round like fingers drum and make a friend of gold.
I suspect the way you're christened is the best that names can do.
Though if names had really listened, you'd come before the fire'd ensued
For your warmth's a welcome blazing as a cozy hearthside flame
And your smile's a curtain raising-- a portrayal worth acclaim.
Your vivid warmth revives me like a phoenix borne of coal.
Your benevolence contrives zeal as sunrise o'er scenic knoll.
But I've more such wish of days to come than strength to be so bold
As to tiptoe round like fingers drum and make a friend of gold.
I wish you were more tangible-- like vivid tangerine.
Although it's understandable, our separation: mien.
Yet hope is sparked just one time more for you're not like the rest,
So possibly our blunt rapport might one day burn it’s best.
Copyright ©
liquidsunshine
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2004-11-30 16:03:08]
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 04:07:57 PM AEST
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mmm a lovely write, glad that you are positng again, I have really missed your writes Chelsea, great work,
pixie xx |
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by n2dep2care on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 04:17:57 PM AEST
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Warm and beautiful! Wonderful write.
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by lifefliesby on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 04:25:43 PM AEST
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Great write babe
It Has been a while since you've posted and it's clear it's you can get thru any writer's block
I've seen it and this proves it
keep em up Chels
I love you,
Jared |
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by Flipped_out on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 08:26:25 AM AEST
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Wonderful..this really conveyed a beautiful warm picture to me, so vivid strong and colourful
Bravo!!!!!
Kelly x |
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 03:40:27 PM AEST
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Wonderful, Chelsea! How amazing the object of this poem must feel. Such gratitude and appreciation. The language in it, the sentence order and structure was amazing, and the small use of the repetition of that one stanza strengthened it a lot. Wonderfully done. Keep posting...I missed you.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by Stitch on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 06:06:28 AM AEST
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I can't guess, so you'll just have to pm and tell me. I'm guessing that this one came easily, but I could be wrong. It is so warm and lovely and the use of rhyme is divine.
Stitch |
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Re: Vivid Tangerine
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by freckle on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 05:02:37 PM AEST
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| It was a really nice poem. I felt cozy reading it. Looking forward to more! |
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