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Pain starts to grow
Contributed by
sandy_poetrygodslove
on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:06:57 PM in AEST
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Nose tingling,
Tears flooding my eyes,
Thoughts of tomorrow
Come here today,
Wishing I will never see the day
I dont want to see it,
Don't even say
Can't hold it
Don't want to know it
Just let me run away.
Pain already here,
Knowing and waiting,
Darkness is in the sky
No light in the tunnel
No beating of the heart
That is the way it will be
The day that we will part.
Tears behind the lids,
Waiting to appear,
Feeling the ache inside
wish it would disappear.
Don't want to touch it,
Don't want to hold it,
Want to let go of it,
and let it disappear.
Can't grasp it,
Can't shake it,
Won't allow it,
Please help me dear.
The pain is too early,
Everything is ok,
I can lay it down
I can make it go away.
But some day
But some way
But some time
it will be here.
Pain is growing now again
and now here comes the tears.
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Re: Pain starts to grow
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:09:08 PM AEST
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It's that horrible feeling that you have when your child is missing. It grips you with such intense fear...and then, in an instant, it is gone. I felt that while away in NY last week, and I understand what you were feeling here. You described it very well.
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Re: Pain starts to grow
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by LEMMEN on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:17:51 PM AEST
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This is how my faimly must feel as i become sicker by the day with HIV/AIDS. You write your thoughts very very well Thanks for sharing it brought a tear to my heart.
~~DENNIS~~ |
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Re: Pain starts to grow
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by ladyaryssa on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:36:14 PM AEST
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"But some day
But some way
But some time
it will be here."
I didn't like this bit. Not overly sure why, I just didn't think it fit. Try to avoid getting cliche with your imagery, but at least you use it, kudos for that.
The first and fourth stanzas I liked very much. Promising stuff! |
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