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Awaiting Sunrise
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 11:39:50 PM in AEST
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Darkness comes and tears return
In memory, a candle burns
Breaking then behind the door
I beg no one for something more
Recklessness of thought descends
Unwitting victim, life, suspends
Repeatedly, the story’s told
Half is missing from the whole
Wisdom, now, need not apply
Truth is seen through closed eyes
Confessing naught what might offend
Never though, do hearts pretend
Now, roses seem to matter less
They’re merely tokens of what’s left
Petals dried by forgotten time
Pitied dots on a wayward line
To a future without, I shall attend
On this, I’m certain, peace depends
As pink converts to mossy green
I set myself and dare to dream
With tears continuing to cascade
A desperate wish is quietly made
Though fear has yet to find an end
Tomorrow, I know, the sun ascends
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 12:42:42 AM AEST
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| This is so beautiful! I love the way it flows so naturally...Great job! Thank you for sharing. |
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by autumngreeneyes on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:47:29 AM AEST
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| I hope you're right..for you I hope that sunrise comes.. |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 02:08:24 AM AEST
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Great rhyming. with a positive ending, wonderful work.
johnny. |
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 08:16:09 AM AEST
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brilliant SNM :) loved it!!!
pixie xx |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 12:14:34 PM AEST
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this is beautiful, i love how it takes off and flies in different directions, very pretty affect:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 09:31:25 AM AEST
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The roses always fade away and tomorrow always comes. This is heartfelt and real. I have spent many a tearful night, and I can relate. Lovely words from a lovely woman.
Stitch |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 02:40:50 PM AEST
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Great rhyming, but much more....there are some really potent lines in your poem. There certainly seems to be a heartfelt message.
Masterful write, I really liked it!
Willofree |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Always on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 09:48:40 PM AEST
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| .....ascends..no doubt...good read.. |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 02:08:29 AM AEST
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Fear not fair maiden ~
For as sure as the sun doth rise on the morrow, the winds shall blow away thy sorrow. Doubt and fear will fall away, as dreams reborn appear one day. Tears of pain, to joy will turn and from dying embers passions burn. Know this, do I with all heart ... for tomorrow brings a brand new start.
I call to the four corners and the winds that blow therein ~ Take me to my future for I stand ready ! Do your worst, for though I may bend ... I shant be broken.
Nazzy ~
( who believes he too can be long winded )
A truly fabulous write SNM !!! |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 05:15:17 PM AEST
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I would love to take each line here and make a comment....how about just the stanzas...
Nope ..that was way too long, had to delete it...
Soooo Overall....Nope deleted that too..sheesh
OK in a nutshell..
There is something, (someone?) missing in your life that seems to be unatainable. Therefore comes great sadness, then trying to accept it while maintaining hope.
Yet underneath the lines I see the acceptance as being forced, there is almost a giving up here.
Yet the answer is here within your own lines
"Never though, do hearts pretend"
Kepp faith, DON"T give up....and don't let go of your dreams.
Though you've said so, I think it will surprise you when the sun finnally DOES come up...and one day, it will. |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 07:12:57 PM AEST
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Oh, SNM!!! This was freaking INCREDIBLE!!!!
My due apologies for not returning soon enough to your
page. Damn, girl! I wish I had the will to express the way
you so effortlessly can. Tis a gift, sweet SNM.
And I so relate to these words. I could get lost in them.
.....until the sun ascends
Spectacularrifical!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(how's that for making words up?)
Take a bow and feel the immeasurable and undying applause you so deserve!
Amazing!
~Breezy |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 07:49:33 AM AEST
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"Never though, do hearts pretend"
*smiles*
Emotionally warm and courageous . . . it has the hue of a wintry sunrise, I think . . . |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 12:51:02 PM AEST
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This is so very sad, yet leaves me with a feeling of hope. You write with such...heart.
Happiness..and sunshine.... will surely seek you out my friend
Very well written
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 06:19:30 PM AEST
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Oh hunni...
I think...I will read this, over and over again, and keep coming back to it, it is so sad, but so beautiful.
I know how you've been feeling lately, and I hope that tomorrows sun shines bright for you and that the nights are short.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to go and read this again.
I could fall into your words.
*hugs you tons and tons*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by emystar on
Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 12:08:23 AM AEST
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A masterpeice.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 12:50:04 AM AEST
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again another wonderfull poem from u snm good job.
SM
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 05:27:01 AM AEST
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I think this was terrific. I enjoy your work more often than i say - and just wanted to stop here to let you know that this one, today, made me stop, and re read - The best of poetry is that you can read again and again and find new meaning in each worn word.
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 07:25:36 AM AEST
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| incredible.. |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 04:45:54 PM AEST
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| Beautifully written. |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by NightOwl on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 07:48:18 PM AEST
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Amazing and breathtaking... you have true talent!! What more can I say?
*~Erin~* |
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Re: Awaiting Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 05:16:08 AM AEST
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Every word, every line, every nuance of this poem is so.....so very breathtaking. You know I think I read this one about ten times tonight.
I know you wrote this a long time ago and I think you still know that tomorrow the sun will ascend.
*huge random hug anyway* K? :-)
*off topic*
Here's a bit of trivia for ya'...you posted this on my sister's birthday.
What does that have to do with anything? Maybe nothing. Yeah, probably nothing....but seeing that line Tomorrow, I know, the sun ascends hope....Snemmers...hope.
Timbo
(who is still trying to hang on to "hope" for many different reasons. One of them being Debbie but still many other hopes dancing around out there)
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