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Untitled
Contributed by
everxsoxsweet
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Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 03:44:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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I look over at you,
and i slowly begin to melt.
Endlessly reaching out to you,
But never being felt.
Whenever i see you,
i cannot look away,
That feeling that washes over me,
Is one i want to stay.
But your so beautiful,
And deserve nothing less
Than someone perfect,
And i,
Am just a beautiful mess.
Copyright ©
everxsoxsweet
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2004-11-29 15:44:55]
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Re: Untitled
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 09:01:26 PM AEST
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I like it so far. Perhaps what is most appealing is our imperfections, as that is what makes us so unique.
A worthy beginning; or maybe it's complete
Willofree
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Re: Untitled
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by CAUGHTinAdream on
Monday, 13th December 2004 @ 08:04:07 PM AEST
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Kay! Or should i say kazzle lezzle muzzle? Well Im silly but ur poems are awesome! I really hope it works out with u and *u kno who* bc u deserve to have him and anything else ur heart desires =). Dont forget to growl and trip alla those wonderful people :) lol j/k. Well this is gettin a lil on the long side, but keep up the awesome work, i cant wait to read some more masterpieces!
Love ya,
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Re: Untitled
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by noid_schizoid on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 11:31:52 PM AEST
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| I've only been browsing a short while, but this is one of the better efforts I've seen. I like some of the interplay you have going on and the twist you turn upon yourself at the end. May I make a suggestion? Try to write some stuff that doesn't necessarily rely on a rhyme scheme, or hide your schemes in a clever manner. Let the words develop as they may rather than letting the meter determine where you put your words. All in all, nice. |
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Re: Untitled
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 02:22:07 AM AEST
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I liked it a lot, Kaylee, and this was about the "G" huh? lol...it was a good write...beyond good, it was great
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