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Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
Contributed by
little_genna
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Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 04:17:30 AM in AEST
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Tear out what is left of a now crushed heart,
Hold it in your hands, rip it apart.
Make me suffer for whatever reason you wish,
Watch as I fall to my knees
You would have once kissed me.
Now you turn me away like a hated animal.
You made me fall for you, just to hurt me.
I hurt with so much love in my body and soul.
You made me feel whole.
Alas, you had the power to rip it all away,
In a flash it was gone, and now I am left to pay.
For love I am crushed and punished
(This isnt a complete poem but I couldnt finish it...... Any thoughts on a finish would be appreciated thanks)
SJ
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 04:35:07 AM AEST
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that was a nice poem even tho its not finished yet.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by Vampyre_BloodWraith on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 05:28:33 AM AEST
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| Awesome write, written in strength and power. |
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by girish on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 06:13:03 AM AEST
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its really heart felt read my poem on how she could express her love. you had expresssed your love and the result in this poem, half-way.
Hearts like doors will open with ease
To very, very little keys
Two of these are I thank you and if you please
If you don`t love, give your hearts please
Take this finish and see if it fits
girish
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by pixie on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 09:11:33 AM AEST
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a very powerful write.,
pixie xx |
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by Mangs on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 12:40:27 PM AEST
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hi ...worried about u....
pls lemme know ur ok....
Love ,
Umang. |
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by Doriens_Picture on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 01:51:50 PM AEST
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| richard is not worth your time it would be best that you try and forget him and take away his power |
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 09:08:07 AM AEST
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| Very painful & very powerful. Awesome poem! |
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Re: Rip My Heart OUT!!!!!!!!!
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 04:05:02 PM AEST
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Actually, I disagree. lol I think it is a finished poem.
Nicely written, the pain expressed can really be felt. I hope things get better....
*hugz*
~ Marissa |
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