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Tears of Remembrance
Contributed by
essentially9
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Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 08:11:40 PM in AEST
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Tears of Remembrance
The crystallized tears
Have melted
Even perfection
Isn't flawless
In the Reaper's eyes of it
The dying flames
Through remembrance live
Even flaws
Are perfect
In the eyes beholding death
The shards of mirror
Containing fear
Cause the cuts that sear
The shards of mirror
Pieces itself back together
When you fall apart in tears
The shattered image
Blood splattered
The fragmented image
Tear rusted
The fire died in your eyes
Your heart has frozen to ice
Bent and broken till it's over
The lies are the truth that cover
Your eyes to ever see
The perfection you are to me
You are scarred on the outside and within
But for you I'd take my life to mend them
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by LilGnefkow on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 08:35:02 PM AEST
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| Wow, you really have some talent. Lots of talent. This is so beautiful. |
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by Doriens_Picture on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 09:06:55 PM AEST
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| this is heautiful and filled with tragedy it is amazing |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 01:41:53 AM AEST
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powerful work well presented, excellent.
Johnny. |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 04:12:58 AM AEST
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This is such a powerfull and emotional write, i really enjoyed this. Every stanza has passion and pain into it.
hugs,
jane |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by Unheard_Mute on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 03:49:23 PM AEST
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| I don't know what to say, your poetry seems so different, not in a bad way, just... different. Good job |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by autumngreeneyes on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 05:12:03 PM AEST
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| Something about mirror shards reflecting in bits and pieces that's mezmorizing.. |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by evilcherry312 on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 12:58:07 AM AEST
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| so moving...i actually almost cried. your talent is amazing. |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by savedbydeath on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 06:08:27 PM AEST
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awesome write,keep up the great job!!
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 10:37:33 AM AEST
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This is definitely one of my favorites of yours.
It's molded together so beautifully. There's
just something about this that grabs you and
consumes you with it's words. Each stanza is
so powerful, the imagery, wow. The first
stanza is breathtaking.
"The crystallized tears
Have melted
Even perfection
Isn't flawless
In the Reaper's eyes of it
The dying flames
Through remembrance live
Even flaws
Are perfect
In the eyes beholding death"
You truly did a wonderful job here. |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 07:15:09 PM AEST
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| This was a fantastic write. At times I wish I could write like this. Keep on penning. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Tears of Remembrance
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by PumpkinPie on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 11:36:47 PM AEST
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Wow,that was one powerful write if I do say so myself.The first stanza really amazed me,but then again,you crafted such great verses that made for a great piece.
PumpkinPie |
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