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your secret admirer
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 10:40:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Dear Aubrey:
just thought i'd drop you a line
and tell you that i saw you
the other day in the coffee shop
i really liked the butterfly clippie
that you had in your hair
it was pretty
gotta go
just know that
i'm thinking of you
signed,
Your Secret Admirer
Dear Aubrey:
saw you again
at the store
i admire the way you shop
only healthy foods
i only wish i had that kind of will power, haha
i'm beginning to fill out a bit
but i won't give up
i'll slim down
for you
gotta go
just know that
i'm trying for you
signed,
Your Secret Admirer
Dearest Aubrey:
who's the new man?
i saw you with him tonight
a bit brutish, don't you think?
you seem like you need a man
that's got a softer touch
a kinder smile
maybe a little pot belly, haha
anyway, you should stay away from him
he's bad news
i've got a feeling he's headed for trouble
gotta go
just know that
i'm looking out for you
signed,
Your Secret Admirer
Dear Dear Aubrey:
oh honey
i'm so sorry to hear what happened
i told you he was headed for trouble
and what a terrible way to die
and afterwards
being cut all to pieces like that
or maybe i'm saying too much, haha
you'll thank me later
when you understand
and you will
soon
gotta go
just know that
i'm watching you
signed,
Your Secret Admirer
Aubrey:
i saw the car outside your house
the unmarked car with two men inside
i even heard you make the call
how are we ever supposed to fall in love
if you call the police on me?
no matter, leave it to me
it takes two to tango
but i've danced alone before
and soon, you'll learn to love
soon, you'll join me
gotta go
just know that
i'm coming for you
signed,
Your White Knight
Dear Diary:
i don't guess the police took her seriously
for, though they watched the street
in front of her home,
her back door was unguarded
she's quite a fighter
but chained in the basement
she doesn't seem quite so fierce
she spit in my face when i tried to kiss her
so i sewed her lips together
and carved my name into her face
after that, she calmed down a bit
i'm not worried though
we've got all the time in the world
she'll come around eventually
i'll see to it
love conquers all
even the will of an ungrateful *****
she WILL love me
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Blanchard:
i'm terribly sorry to hear
of your dear daughter's disappearance
she and i were the best of friends
though i doubt she spoke of me
if there's anything i can do
please don't hesitate to call
gotta go
just know that
i'm thinking of you
(unsigned)
P.S.
don't get your hopes up
Copyright ©
Cancer
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Re: your secret admirer
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 11:05:04 PM AEST
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| ::stunned:: yes, that was very psychotic. thank god i dont have any secret admirer... |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 11:10:45 PM AEST
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| omg, creepy, i love it!!! |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by jaeann on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 11:17:50 PM AEST
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| god .. chilling.....i've missed your work..... |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 01:02:46 AM AEST
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yes I would say quite creepy. I loved this and
to quote you this poem deserves a bag of
berry skittles.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 03:00:30 AM AEST
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Ohhh that's just creepy, I love this live the best:
"she spit in my face when I tried to kiss her
so I sewed her lips together
and carved my name into her face
after that, she calmed down a bit"
That was just psychotic, such a good write.
Scared,
Jane |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by pixie on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 10:19:45 AM AEST
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sheeshh that was chilling and creepy, but very powerful, great write,
pixie xx |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 05:45:33 PM AEST
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totally chilling....... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:16:53 PM AEST
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| lol, - that was great. Excellent write/story. |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 01:45:00 PM AEST
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I have to admit that this was thrilling - psycho stuff. Nice job - it felt real...
*leaves quietly, and wonders about the author...*
good stuff!! |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by zenmind on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 05:02:07 PM AEST
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wow, I'm finding more and more crazy poets on this site. Nice....This poem is insane. Of course that was your intention. Well done. I like how the story unfolded, through all of the letters. Very creative. This could be expanded into a novel and you could instert each letter into the appropriate place in the story. But I like it how it is.... F*cked up.
Be True,
zenmind |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by SavingMarion on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 06:12:49 PM AEST
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| i saw you left a nice comment on one of my poems so i figured i'd check out your writing. i must say that i was not dissapointed. this poem is absolutely amazing. it is one of the best that i have read in a very very very long time. wow!! |
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Re: your secret admirer
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by hardcoreputa on
Wednesday, 26th January 2005 @ 08:20:08 PM AEST
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roy,
this poem has the same kind of chilling feeling that i get when i read "love poem (sort of)" which is still my all time favorite of yours. however this poem is even more morbid and twisted... so obviously i enjoyed it tremendously. i think im going to go lock my door now ~Apryl |
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