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The Child (remorse in A minor)
Contributed by
undeadsuperstar
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Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 12:09:55 PM in AEST
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a voice in my head
the sound of decay
draws tight my skin
across my bones
the sound of sin
like the buzzing of flies
prying open an eye
inside my twisted mind
now i see the light
twitching in the glare
flinching from the stare
of the long deceased
maggotropolis
rotting in the corner
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undeadsuperstar
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2004-11-26 12:09:55]
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Re: The Child (remorse in A minor)
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by Pyrofungus on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 12:15:53 PM AEST
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wow...i love the way you write...so much talent...i can picture it all...i have a whole story in my head now...great job man
summer |
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Re: The Child (remorse in A minor)
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by EternalNight4x on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 12:18:56 PM AEST
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| very well written poem, a very interesting topic that should be adressed...murder is a part of life and I think you wrote about it very well in the eyes of the murderer...very well write keep posting |
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Re: The Child (remorse in A minor)
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by blackholesun on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 12:30:28 PM AEST
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hey,its diffrent i liked the brilliant use of description in this poem,i agree death is a part of life i find it an easily disscusting topic for others,
however it seems you got a natural flow for this type of poetry not many people do,i appreciate the ginuine artistry of this shadow bent poem,
i too got a poem simmilar,day dream of murder,
keep up the writing your an awesome poet! |
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Re: The Child (remorse in A minor)
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by THORN on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 03:18:56 AM AEST
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I have to admit that the intro to the poem was far more interesting than the poem itself. You're a good debator, I suppose. Quite convincing.
Anyway, the overall of the poem:
It was quite short, not totally what I was expecting, and plain reality. Touching on mythology and maybe some senses (e.g. "I see a white light"). Just stuff like that.
But it's great, 5 stars~! Keep it up! ;)
Cheers,
-XRaye |
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