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Losing It
Contributed by
undeadsuperstar
on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 11:16:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Bow down succumb
and worship
The electric god
Wires to veins
Metal and blood
To power the flesh
Twitch to the rhythm
The sparkle of agony
Flickering in the eyes
Of abandoned children
Abort the feeling
Cave in to apathy
The surviving savior
Suspended by
A weakening thread
Of sanity
Dripping blood
like a dead rainbow
Silently sliding down
Glistening rivulets
On the serrated blade
Of my kitchen knife
messiah
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undeadsuperstar
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2004-11-26 11:16:29]
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Re: Losing It
(User Rating: 1 )
by Pyrofungus on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 11:24:30 AM AEST
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man this is great...powered by electricity...such a nice way of torcher...Loved how ya wrote this...brilliant!
please comment on my work too
summer |
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Re: Losing It
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by EternalNight4x on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 11:54:25 AM AEST
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| very interesting and well written piece of work...I like the way you decsribed the dripping of blood, 'dripping blood like a dead rainbow" very creative... |
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Re: Losing It
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by deathdrop on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 12:14:54 PM AEST
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wow!
a very interesting poem.
it's strangly put with great style. |
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Re: Losing It
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by DamentedSuicide on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 04:05:15 PM AEST
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I really like this one
wonerfully written
~~~Raven~~~ |
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