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Lines Of Red
Contributed by
HumGirl18
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Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 01:30:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I close my eyes and melt in shame
I pull my knees in close
A thought
A wish to have you hear
My tear drops as they fall
I wish that you could see
The puddles you help me to create
I make a wish for you to know
The colors on the floor
It outlines and it shines
In it's own unhapply little way
As it begins to form and shape
It brings about a calming face
You see the line as red
Dripping all around with death
Though I still see it blue
Dripping through and into you
With a little thing called love
Copyright ©
HumGirl18
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2002-11-23 01:30:00]
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Re: Lines Of Red
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 03:48:52 AM AEST
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wow.. when i started reading i was like "hm hm hm" and then when i got to the second stanza i was totally enthralled.. the last 5 lines totally help to end this poem strongly.
such a good poem. great job!
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Re: Lines Of Red
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by OreO on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 05:01:15 AM AEST
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This is beautifully written
i agree the ending of this poem
was beautiful, it's full of depth
and vision, Thanks for sharing
this one, i enjoyed reading it
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Lines Of Red
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by Sarah22 on
Thursday, 12th December 2002 @ 12:08:46 AM AEST
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| neat poem :*) |
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