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Slowly Fading
Contributed by
addicted2selfharm
on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 09:45:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Look at my arms...look at my chest...look at my thighs...look into my eyes....
Can't you see what my pain has done?
I'm alive...but slowly fading away...
A new cut closens death...
Slowly fading, losing my breath, slowly fading, as I reach my final death.
The crimson color sliding out of my weakening vein...the pain eternal...
Do the pleasure of finishing me off...
Choke me to death with no regards...
Kiss my cold lips as I fade away...
Just know our love was meant to end this way...
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2004-11-23 21:45:32]
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Re: Slowly Fading
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by HellsLibrarian on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 09:49:11 PM AEST
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| Well, if not stupid (which I don't think this is), this poem is definitely supposed to be the start of somebody's guilt trip. Good vocabulary use, no spelling errors, and a reasonably good flow. I say B+. Hey, read my poem "Dark Thoughts" and tell me what you think, ok? Thanks. |
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Re: Slowly Fading
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by LEMMEN on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 11:45:56 PM AEST
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Not stupid The sadness is very deep within. But you are not alone in this struggle. Many of us who injury themseleves feel this way a lot of the time. "GOOD WRITE"
~DENNIS~ |
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