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Sleep and Love
Contributed by
hilaryduffisme_yah
on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 08:59:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Sleep won't come to me
I can't see
My lives blinding me
Terrorizing me
Mezmorizing me
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hilaryduffisme_yah
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2004-11-23 20:59:51]
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Re: Sleep and Love
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 09:15:56 PM AEST
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| i think this is a good poem, but this isnt in haiku format. haiku format is 5 syllabuls in the first line then 7, and then 5 in the third line. constricts the words but not the meaning if you do it right =] since this poem is so short i think you should find more words for the ending instead of all "me's" and one "see". poems dont have to rhyme at all, your pen can write whatever it wishes. i hope you are doing well in maine. =] |
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Re: Sleep and Love
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by xMizeriex on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 06:24:58 AM AEST
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Short and sweet.
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