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A Raccoon Stuck In The Bottleneck
Contributed by
Diatribe
on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:01:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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If the view from your window were painted with perfection
That steady hand would have been your own
But you were shaking at the knees
And the love was never home
If they only knew that you were about to fall
They would have held your feet
So that you wouldn’t choke
But they weren’t even close
We should have colored happiness
With every little crayon
In the form of rain
If those were the days they loved you most
And I never would have let you tie that noose
Copyright ©
Diatribe
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2004-11-22 18:01:35]
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Re: A Raccoon Stuck In The Bottleneck
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by n2dep2care on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 09:40:28 AM AEST
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Sad and beautiful dedication. Well done.
Laurie |
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Re: A Raccoon Stuck In The Bottleneck
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by fielding88 on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 10:35:09 AM AEST
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| Anything involving a noose by the end of it has to kind of tug at you. This was such a sad poem, but I enjoyed it because of that. Nice read. |
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Re: A Raccoon Stuck In The Bottleneck
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by mysticaldancer on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 11:18:00 AM AEST
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| your feelings radiated out of this poem...it was almost as if i could feel the same pain you did when you found out...sad, but beautiful poem...very well written |
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