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Star-Crossed
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
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Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 12:11:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Darling, the nights that I dwell in are hourless.
These shadows have rendered my heart and soul nebulous
Yet still I linger on in remnants of your kiss
You seem to move right through me, a phantom lost in time
My dear, have you forgotten all that you sacrificed for me?
Darling, the days here without you are sunless.
Your voice is burning into me from somewhere far away
These ghostly melodies I hear sung to me at night
You seem to hover above me, a rose beyond my reach
My heartless raven, will you forever haunt me?
Darling, the words that I weep now are powerless.
The days when you loved me have ended true
With your name on my lips I pray that you'll bless me
With this drink in my veins I pray that the end is swift
Fear not, for in death you will find me...
Beside you at the end of our star-crossed tale.
Copyright ©
Avarice_Riot
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by witch_derna on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 12:26:10 AM AEST
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Words spoke from the heart are always powerful :) Love is never easy but worth every struggle. This is very good.
Blessed Be.
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by emystar on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 12:37:39 AM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
Very deep.
Hang tuff, my friend.
luv, huggs, faith, hope,
emy |
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by venkat on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 04:37:22 AM AEST
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deeply moving..very sad..well written poem..
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by Stitch on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 08:47:53 AM AEST
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So sad and real. The course of such love is a long and rocky path.
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 04:16:29 PM AEST
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wow so beautiful and so equally sad. I have
no words that will do this poem justice. I am
in awe.
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by Ronald on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 10:04:32 AM AEST
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| Hey, it's been a pleasure reading your work! Great and powerful poem you have here. Thanks for sharing your work, pal! |
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by autumngreeneyes on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 07:13:17 AM AEST
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I find this another romeo and juliet or anthony and cleo..
I read it over and over again looking for something more..perhaps I am over tired..I know that I am very tired..I will come back and start fresh.. |
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 08:27:22 AM AEST
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i found this to be beautiful and moving, well done.
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by arden on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 08:56:11 PM AEST
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well i already was pretty over emotional tonight and this did me in lol *wipes tears*
damn... this was so sad even tho at the end theres a twinkle of hope. its a beautiful, nicely written poem.
it reaches sad depths and emotional ones.
i loved this write.
5 stars
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by sicknivesevered on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 12:49:08 PM AEST
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| This has already been called beautiful, but I just have to add the word 'stunning' to it. Excellent write. |
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Re: Star-Crossed
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 12:52:59 AM AEST
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This is so very moving. It absolutely tugs at the reader's heart. Even still - I'm certain that compared to the emotions embedded in it from the writer's perspective - the reader knows so very little of how incredibly deep those emotions run.
Truly touching - and - very well done,
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