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Stare at the Sun
Contributed by
essentially9
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Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 08:13:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Stare at the Sun
You open your eyes
To the darkness
All you find is nothing
To hold on to
You close your eyes
To the brightness
All you find is your sin
To comfort you
You stare at the sun
Blinded by tears of sorrow
That were caused from
The never coming morrow
You close your eyes
While you're letting go
You never see that I try
To tell you of my love
Your anger and depression
Burned holes through your soul
Emptiness is the only emotion
You feel while life takes its toll
The sun stares at you
Past the darkness
That you go through
With its brightness
You closed your eyes
While you were letting go
With no reason to live at all
By yourself
You opened your eyes
Too late to see my love
And without its comfort you fall
With only emptiness to be felt
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essentially9
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by Doriens_Picture on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 08:22:16 PM AEST
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| hey this is beautiful just like you |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by CodyJ on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 09:01:02 PM AEST
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| Beautiful. Kudos. |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 09:02:49 PM AEST
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| very good work here..good job |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by Cynthia on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 10:18:12 PM AEST
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| This was wonderful. Very well done. It's perfect. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 10:44:52 PM AEST
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wonderful write.. I especially like the ending
awesome job
Peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by a_bear on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 09:18:52 AM AEST
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| WOW! powerful write.. I love every line.. the ending rocks.. good job.. |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by hilaryduffisme_yah on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 05:25:00 PM AEST
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| This was awesome! Thanks for clearing up what a hiaku was for me ^_^! |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by LEMMEN on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 07:42:21 PM AEST
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And you call my words powerful.
~~DENNIS~~ |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 08:50:01 PM AEST
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Brilliant write (no pun intended)
Jenni |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 12:14:19 AM AEST
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powerful stuff! an excellent read.
Johnny. |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by emystar on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 12:02:35 AM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
Hang tuff my firend.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by Unheard_Mute on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 07:19:57 PM AEST
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| sorry jen, you're going to have to explain this one to me... it's too intelligent for my blood... |
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Re: Stare at the Sun
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by AndTheFoolShallBurn on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 03:02:30 PM AEST
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| Sometimes, with nothing left to hold onto, we have nothing left to hold us back either. Much love... |
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