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Escape for Freedom
Contributed by
sean88
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Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 10:32:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
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She sits alone in her dark, cold chair,
Sterile old granny casting a stare,
Black, large eyes like a bead,
However cautiously I still proceed
Our house is sodden and filled with shoes,
The colour of the walls are light yet navy blue,
Peeling ceiling and bare boned floor,
I’ll wait for a chance then rush for the door
As I gather momentum, the exit is near,
In a few seconds I’ll be rid of my fear,
Downs goes the handle, daylight breaks through,
From here on in my life is new
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sean88
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2004-11-20 10:32:46]
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Re: Escape for Freedom
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 05:14:53 PM AEST
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| well I loved this its flowed so well Im suprised no one posted what they thought they should all be ashamed lol well keep it up... |
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Re: Escape for Freedom
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th January 2005 @ 12:16:23 AM AEST
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| Interesting, although I'm unsure how quickly old granny could run after you even if she saw you leave. *grins* You might want to take the S off of "downs." But it's an interesting poem. Cheers! |
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