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Please Dark Angel
Contributed by
pixie
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Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 11:15:19 AM in AEST
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Please dark angel take me away,
Here on earth I don’t wish to stay,
I have had more than my fair share,
I am laid out naked, vulnerable & bare.
I seek the shelter of your black wings,
To listen to the morbid songs you sing,
Take me into you I want to be your slave,
Come lay with me in my shallow grave.
Your touch feeds my very desires,
You will make my soul never expire,
As we dance on the edge of your knife,
In front of my eyes flashes my old life.
I see all those I hurt, all that I lost,
My depression came at such a cost,
It destroyed me & everything I had,
It turned me insides all rotten & bad.
But with you I feel pain no more,
As you stare into me your eyes do bore,
They penetrate my soul as I let out a cry,
Force me into an unnatural, dark high.
Dark angel please hear my calls,
Lift me over my prison walls,
There is only you who can help me survive,
I have forgotten what it is to feel alive.
Copyright ©
pixie
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by Spazzo on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 11:21:39 AM AEST
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| Good write but sad write. I hope you feel better. |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by waos on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 11:38:26 AM AEST
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| that was really sad and empty. *hugs* i know the pain that flows out with those words. that poem is a good beginning. I believe you could develop that into something really amazing. good work. |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by Stitch on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 11:43:37 AM AEST
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The last stanza is so painfully poignant.
Your writing is growing so much.
Stitch |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 11:49:11 AM AEST
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wow amazing write.. i hope you don't feel this sad.. you don't wanna die you have alot to live for and look forward too.. you may not see it now but there is something good for everyone and your day too will come .. just take each day as it comes ..
Peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by jaeann on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 12:56:38 PM AEST
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| so dark and profound.....i see your work sung by amy lee..........amazing.... |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 01:25:28 PM AEST
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* runs up and kicks that Dark Angel right in the shin ... puts hand on hips and pouts. Shakes fist at Big Mr Bad Dark Angel and says...... " NO !!! You can't have her yet !!! We need he here ... !!! " Turns and hugs Pixie.
I think that might be evidence that I am beginning to spend WAY too much time in the forums.
A sad write pixie ... with nice flow and structure. I have a shoulder should you find yourself in need of one.
Naz ~ |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by EternalNight4x on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 02:25:59 PM AEST
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| very well written and very creative....keep on posting |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 02:35:51 PM AEST
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Beautiful and sad at the same time. I hope things work out for you in the end. Written to perfection.
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by reprobate on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 03:10:25 PM AEST
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beautiful piece of work...hoping it's only prose!
thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by daydreamer22 on
Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 12:17:34 AM AEST
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wow...i really like your work...its amazing...and i feel that the last line of the first stanza really connects to how i have been feeling l8ly...keep up the osm work...
Awaiting your next...
~*ME*~ |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by lunartune on
Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 08:49:59 AM AEST
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| Really nice, very touching. I think it's great. Hope you feel better. I'll look forward to reading some more of your work. |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by pander on
Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 11:48:03 AM AEST
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Another great write Pixie.
keep up tyhe good work
Pander
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by theMoth on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:57:19 PM AEST
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Scary...
I've been called 'Dark Angel'.
I liked the poem though.
--Mothy |
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Re: Please Dark Angel
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by Fluffhead on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 10:09:53 PM AEST
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| wow! nice write. i'm sorrry you feel that way. i know just where your at. hope to read more. |
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