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Rain Maker
Contributed by
Unheard_Mute
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Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 08:56:53 PM in AEST
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I woke this morning to the sound of the rain,
Awoke with nightmares of hurt and pain,
But as the window was hit with drops,
My thoughts cease, and the pain stops,
For quite some time I listened and lied,
Listened as the world cried outside,
Layed all alone in my little bed,
Hearing as every tear was shed,
Slowly, I began to seep back into my mind,
Leaving the loneliness and rain behind,
When I came to, the rain had passed,
And it made me sad that it did not last,
So I began to weep, onto the cloth sewn,
Slowly I smiled, I made rain of my own...
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2004-11-18 20:56:53]
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Re: Rain Maker
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by Clementine on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 09:02:25 PM AEST
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| This is beautifully written...wonderfully descriptive...I really enjoyed it. |
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Re: Rain Maker
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 09:21:59 PM AEST
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| youre hope was not in vain =] i loved this, very creative, and very well presented. this doesnt look like your usual sonnet though, but hrm sonnets arent my speciality, so im just wrong.... |
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Re: Rain Maker
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by savedbydeath on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 09:50:07 PM AEST
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i didnt like this...i loved this,i loved how u described everything,for a short moment i was actually there,dont worry,i think alot of us actually do understand how u feel,its not everyday we're all happy and we feel so good,its actually never for me.i hate being happy,it hurts my face bc i gotta smile and i dont like my teeth,anyways awesome write,never give up,keep up the great writes
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Re: Rain Maker
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 12:15:53 AM AEST
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| Yes, I loved this too! It was really hot! |
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Re: Rain Maker
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by secretwind on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 12:54:06 AM AEST
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vivid...nice flow.
The Wind.... |
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Re: Rain Maker
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by jaeann on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 01:13:25 PM AEST
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| irony can bring a smile to one's face sometimes before anything else will.....fear not there are many others' who understand all too well what it is you are feeling....your work is emotive and strong....creative and unique....... |
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Re: Rain Maker
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by CrimsonTears on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 07:04:44 PM AEST
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this was such an amazing poem....i absolutely love it!!!!!!!!......its left me speechless.....i found it weird how i feel like that everytime it rains.....simply amazing
Lots of Love
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Re: Rain Maker
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by Tru2Myself on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 02:58:03 PM AEST
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| Great poem. The last line was truely amazing. LOVED THAT LINE! |
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