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you'll see
Contributed by
kaytie
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Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 11:05:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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_she's not the one for you_
i think you see that too
you can't blame yourself
your only hurting your health
i know it's hard to see
you just have to let her be
she might come back to you
but until then you'll have to become someone new
try to better your life
please don't grab the knife
i know your depressed
but you can't be obsessed
try thinking better
maybe try writing a letter
forget about her
try finding a cure
go out and have fun
until your all done
you will see who you need to be
get some more sleep
and go get something to eat
please don't keep crying, and say you are dying
i hate to see you this way
i hope you find yourself someday
i know you are sad
i hope you get glad
you are a great person
full of love and no hate
you need to find out who to be....
go set yourself free
Copyright ©
kaytie
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2004-11-17 23:05:39]
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Re: you'll see
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by tasteof_ink on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 11:24:47 PM AEST
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I like it. It's nicely written. The rhyming is good. Good Job. I'm new..come read my poem(s) if you'd like.
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Re: you'll see
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 03:05:01 AM AEST
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Nicely written, i enjoy reading this one.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: you'll see
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 06:57:36 AM AEST
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| Awesome poem, with a primo message, like how you discribed what you wanted us to see, it was very visual, and written with tenderness and strength, cool poem flowing with heartfelt feelings...beautifully composed. |
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Re: you'll see
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 08:36:03 AM AEST
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I know how hard it is to see a friend this way, but I have also been this way so I can see it from both sides.
I really like this, it is definatly to the point and has a clear message.
I hope your friend feels better soon.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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