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the fun begins
Contributed by
vampyrekiss
on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 08:37:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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look into my eyes
listin not to my words
just follow me
into the dark
don't strugle
just let it in
hold still now
this is when the fun begins
feel yourself dying?
the pain sets in
dont worry
its not long now
the fun begins
here take my wrist
take me in
tonight
we will hunt
do you feel it yet?
now be quite
you musnt be seen
Take her quick
let her warmth fill you
take it all in
this is when the fun begins
taking every last drop
we now move on
you drop her like as if she was
a bag of flour
for she is no good to us now
we must move quick before the sun
you have much to learn
come now
theres so much to be done
Copyright ©
vampyrekiss
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2004-11-17 20:37:02] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: the fun begins
(User Rating: 1 ) by Deathly_Rose on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 06:57:36 PM AEST (User
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Hey!
wow that was areally good poem, I too lve Ann Rice, she's an awesome vampire writter
Very well written poem. keep up the good work ^.^
-waves-
*~Alicia~* |
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Re: the fun begins
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 01:04:37 PM AEST (User
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lol its funny i dunt read the msgs b4 the poetry so i can make a judgement b4hand..and when I was done i was thinking "Ann Rice," and when i scroll up it was inspired by her. but neways I really enjoyed it, and it was so descriptive and the whole idea of dying in a sort of "darkness" seemed so scary and I loved that. Really good read. |
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Re: the fun begins
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th January 2005 @ 12:08:19 AM AEST (User
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Interesting with some imagery play here. Keep writing and working on spelling too. Cheers! |
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