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SUICIDE
Contributed by
lemmen
on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 02:07:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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She slowly pulled the razor across
her wrist just to feel, How bad it
was going to hurt? When she actually
did it? It wasn't so bad, It felt sort
of nice, To feel something again.
It's been so long since, I have felt
something. Her thoughts began to
wonder, From here to then to what
will never be again. Tears fall from her
eyes, Well this life is over, I'll do better
in the next, It just has to be better.
Ouch! That hurt, As the razor severed
her vein in her wrist. Without even
knowing, She cut deep to deep to fix.
Death is certain this day for her, She
doesn't even know it yet. Blood streams
down to the ground, OH NO! What did
I do, It will stop It's not that bad?
She cannot truly feel the pain, Her
mind is not in the here and now, It's
drifting between then and never again.
And yet again she cut's, Up this time
without feeling it, Crying is she in her
pain of life, Dying without knowing she
is dying.
I asked if she was OK through the
bathroom door, IM fine I'll be out
in a minute, Just checking love you.
That's the last time I ever talked to
her, And know I'm where she was
at alone but not alone. I can see her
pain, Feel it deep within my heart.
I know mine is different we don't have
the same pain. I have the razor in my
hand now, I know how much it hurt's,
I've done it all my life, A couple of times
to the extant, I'm going to do now, It
only hurt's if you let it, Pain isn't my
enemy, Life is, Time is, Her death is.
She was all I ever had, I'll go the same
as her to a point. I believe she didn't
know how bad it was she was unaware.
She had no scares, She never cut before,
I'm the cutter, I have the scares, I kill her,
She knew of all the pains in my life, All the
loved ones, I have lost, I really wished I'd
never lost her, But I'll join her soon.
Two lives wasted, No one life mine. I never
truly knew what she was thinking that day.
I can only guess, But not anymore, Blood
is already flowing from my veins, I did it
the right way, The first time straight up
and down my arm, From my wrist to my
elbow gets it done real quick.
Can't be fix unless you cut off my arm,
They won't make it here that fast.
Honey are you OK in there did you fall
in or what I need to pee. I'll be out in
a minute.
That minute never came, He died in
the same spot she did, Same City, Same
Street, Same house, Same room,
Same spot, Same position.
She slowly pulled the razor across her
wrist, Just to feel how bad it was going
to hurt, When she actually did it.
THE END
BY DENNIS LEMMEN
Copyright ©
lemmen
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2004-11-16 14:07:25]
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Re: SUICIDE
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by Deathly_Rose on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 02:17:54 PM AEST
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I really liked this... yet confusing at parts, some times you may have to re-read things, just to understand what's going on, but I still enjoyed reading this
*~Alicia~* |
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Re: SUICIDE
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by Kitty_cat on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 02:20:00 PM AEST
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wow....
i don't know what else to say...apart from the common 'very emotional write, well done'.
wow.... |
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Re: SUICIDE
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by a_bear on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 02:47:55 PM AEST
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| being a person who has tried to commit suicide herself and seen what it does to the ones who are left to clean up the blood and the stench and deal with the pain and the aftermath I can only say it makes me sick and it is not a victimless crime..it is selfish and brutal. |
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Re: SUICIDE
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by N0body on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 03:18:45 PM AEST
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| This was a very amazing write...very emotional...but very good |
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Re: SUICIDE
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by witch_derna on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 10:14:58 PM AEST
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Hmm, it makes me think back to all the times I was in the bathroom cutting (unknown to you at the time) and you would say "honey are you ok". Then the day I went in there to really finish the job you came in, how you got in to stop me I dont know because the door was locked. I thank you for stopping me though. I love you.
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Re: SUICIDE
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by givingin on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 07:09:26 AM AEST
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Wow LEMMON this was really good,
very emotional but still so good.
I always love reading your poems.
*~givingin~* |
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