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Being There
Contributed by
DarkerSeason
on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 11:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You are such a special girl. There is no one as good as you.
You are the best I have in life, my dream that has come true.
So I'll make you this one promise; if no one else can here your prayer
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.
I'm so glad that you are with me, and I'm so thankful this is real
'Cause there's nothing better in my life than the way you make me feel.
But if your life gets filled with pain and the good times get too rare
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.
I wish that I could show you just exactly what you're worth
Because I know that you are perfect,You are and angel here on earth
But I know that this world isn't heaven and if it fills you with despair
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.
I hope that you trust these words because I mean it when I say
That for you I would do anything, I will help you find your way.
But if you still get lost somehow and no one seems to care,
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.
You are a shooting star, I see you sailing through the sky
But sometimes I can tell that you're not sure where to fly
So if you want me by your side to guide you through the air
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.
Watch me as I fly, watch me as I fly. I finally have it all.
But something isn't right, something isn't right. I'm about to fall.
YOU left ME
You said you no longer want me. You said it was all some big mistake.
And now I'm left here all alone as my heart begins to break.
So I've learned it hurts to lose someone and that this world isn't fair
Because I've closed my eyes to dream a dream, but baby, you're not there.
By Darker Season
Copyright 2002 Darker Season
Copyright ©
DarkerSeason
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2002-11-21 11:00:00]
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Re: Being There
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by starynight0 on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 12:06:00 PM AEST
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I really like this poem. Even tho it ends up really sad it is very nicely written. You did a good job on it... keep up the great writing.
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Re: Being There
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 12:19:43 PM AEST
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Wow, absolutely brilliant! The emotion throughout the poem was simply amazing...it is almost as if you were letting the reader into your heart.
I really liked how you repeated the last line throughout the entire poem, IMHO it really strengthened the impact (especialy when you reversed the viewpoint at the very end). The poem was a real pleasure to read, it flowed really well and the rhyme was perfect.
*Applaud*
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Re: Being There
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 01:50:45 PM AEST
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Absolutely brilliant!! The way you made the poem flow was great... It would sound good if put to music...
Jenni |
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Re: Being There
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by OreO on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 03:27:46 PM AEST
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Beautifully written, your heart and love and pain flow through this poem so strongly, and then at the end there's silence...it's the view it gave me, it's so deep and full of emotion, it's absolutely beautiful, Bravo, you have a "masterpiece" here. Thanks for sharing this one i really enjoyed it
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Re: Being There
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by chatabox on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 08:24:49 PM AEST
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| This was an excellant write, but I hate sad endings sniff sniff. |
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Re: Being There
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by DarkerSeason on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 02:59:34 AM AEST
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| Thankyou very much for your kind words. It is greatly appreciated. When I get time, I will check out some of your poems. Thank you ver much |
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Re: Being There
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by DarkerSeason on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 03:01:05 AM AEST
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| Thank you so much for the kind words you have written to me. It is very humbling and I appreciate it very, very much. When I get the chance, I will go read some of your poems. Thanks again. |
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