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Desperately Finding Hope
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 01:58:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I am the poor player of life.
Strutting and vexing on the stage,
Waiting for the curtain to come down like a guillotine.
Severing the tongue from it's function,
Wagging in desperation for a pallet.
Watching the spotlight burn a hole into my heart
How foolish I have become in love.
Trying to catch ahold of of something tangible with form,
How I want the bullet to come for me.
To end the dance and revel in decay,
Leaving only my heart to beat in resounding rythm for you.
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deadreckoning1983
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2004-11-15 13:58:25]
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Re: Desperately Finding Hope
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by theMoth on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 07:00:52 PM AEST
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Ah, cool, first a take on
Shakespeare's words from MacBeth!
Then you take over in the
most aamzing way.
A guillotine curtain, a spotlight
that burns a hole in your heart...
I often think you're the best poet
on this site.
I've just always found your style
really exciting. Keep it up!
--Mothy
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Re: Desperately Finding Hope
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 04:45:04 PM AEST
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Mothy said it oh so grandly...this was truly amazing, very, very deep too...I loved it
Mason |
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Re: Desperately Finding Hope
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 08:35:07 PM AEST
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And I had to read it again!
--Mothy |
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Re: Desperately Finding Hope
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 01:19:59 PM AEST
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The last line is the best!
You never fail to impress, my dear friend.
Great job!
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Re: Desperately Finding Hope
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 09:43:06 PM AEST
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This is wonderfully pieced together. Especially the last line:
"Leaving only my heart to beat in resounding rythm for you." |
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Re: Desperately Finding Hope
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 13th November 2014 @ 09:01:04 AM AEST
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Yeah, so, this is freaking great! Fantastic lines from start to finish- wow.
I think my favourite might be:
Waiting for the curtain to come down like a guillotine.
Epic.
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