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Beautifull lies
Contributed by
givingin
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Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 08:27:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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Beautiful lies,
but the ugly truth,
which one will it be?
You had your chance,
to just come clean,
this chance you did not see.
I walk away,
as you speak your peace,
with every word you lie.
I fade out of sight,
as you try to chase,
but it’s time to say goodbye.
Your lies once hurt,
but now they’re just there,
and they seem so pathetic for you.
You kept it a secret,
and I found out,
our love was never true.
You thought I was week,
that I could not leave,
but now you know your wrong.
I seemed so week,
but I got tired,
so now I’ve become strong.
Was that girl worth it?
Was she worth your time?
This I’ll never know.
You had me once,
but now no more,
cuz it’s time for me to go.
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Re: Beautifull lies
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by pixie on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 08:35:06 AM AEST
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this is a pained write, there are so many people who are tricked into believing lies that are dressed up in a beauitful coat, but underneath its so very ugly,
brilliant expression used here by you.
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Re: Beautifull lies
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by Stitch on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 08:58:40 AM AEST
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You might want to clean up your spelling a little and remember to use the contraction
you're for you are, but otherwise you've got a full write here.
Nice.
Stitch |
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Re: Beautifull lies
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by afterdark on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 09:04:12 AM AEST
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| Very well written..I liked this one alot. |
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Re: Beautifull lies
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by Avis_Nigra on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 09:23:53 AM AEST
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| fantastic, a sound and real writing... I like it a lot! |
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Re: Beautifull lies
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 12:04:14 PM AEST
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Very nicely written i enjoyed reading your write, did notice the spelling errors tho but i do it sometimes to lol.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: Beautifull lies
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by savedbydeath on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 03:54:23 PM AEST
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Fantastic write,i know where ur comen from with this 1,but i was afraid to let go bc i didnt know what he would do,keep up the great work
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