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nothing
Contributed by
lacymaeflower
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Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 06:35:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Nothing,
If only I could feel,
And life would seem more real,
Before things were bad,
I had reasons to be mad,
Now Ijust feel sad,
I've got nothing to hold on to,
What the ***** am I meant to do?
I just wanna feel sane,
Is all this in vain?
All I see is rain,
It's raining in me,
Why can't I be free,
I just gotta get through this wood,
To find myself and be understood,
But all I feel is NOTHING.
by Lacy mae schoone 14
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lacymaeflower
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2004-11-14 18:35:57]
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Re: nothing
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by neglected1 on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 06:38:45 PM AEST
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sad but a good write... i hope you really dont feel this way ... but if you do i hope you find whats right for you.. and when do make sure to forcfully grab ahold...
luck to you
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Re: nothing
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by a_bear on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 06:52:08 PM AEST
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| It's a nice poem, but I kind of felt like you were using some words just to rhyme.. I don't know..as an example I felt as though you wanted to use the word understood and so you just threw the word wood in there.. but it was a good job..wood is a good word and it lets the feeling across. |
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Re: nothing
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by Unheard_Mute on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 07:09:26 PM AEST
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| Another good poem, tis sad that you feel so badly, truly hope you feel better... |
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