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Prison
Contributed by
van
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Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 07:00:00 AM in AEST
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Life is a prison,
Oh God let me out.
No one to listen,
To hear when you shout.
Climb the walls of insanity,
Ride the waves of despair.
If you fall it don't matter,
There's no one to care.
Used to wish for a window,
To see birds, trees and sky,
But you're better without one -
Stops you aiming too high.
Watching freedom is painful,
For those locked away.
Seeing joy, love and happiness,
Another price that you pay.
Strong is good, weak is bad.
Be it false, be it true.
Your mind makes the choice,
And enforces it too.
Hide the pain, carry on,
Routine is the key.
Don't let on that you're not,
What you're pretending to be.
Lock it all up inside you,
How badly that bodes.
Look out for that one day,
When it all just explodes.
So how do you grow,
With a time bomb inside?
Or how to defuse it,
Without destroying its ride?
You can't!
Copyright ©
van
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2002-11-21 07:00:00]
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Re: Prison
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 07:07:45 AM AEST
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| A lot of pain in your feelings here,but a good write,I liked this! Christina |
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Re: Prison
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 07:30:28 AM AEST
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*applaud*
Your poem flowed well and the rhyme was wonderful. I also like the message and the way you presented it. IMHO...an excellent write and a pleasure to read. :)
Yvonne |
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Re: Prison
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by Written2bRead on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 07:47:49 AM AEST
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that last line is sick!
So how do you grow,
With a time bomb inside?
Or how to defuse it,
Without destroying its ride?
I think you could've followed that longer. The idea that it seems that the only way to end the parasite is to end its host. That... the only way to end a painful life seems to be to end life itself. Is life itself pain though? thus the mystery: how do you end the pain and find real life? why don't you message me or check out my stuff? late |
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Re: Prison
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by OreO on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 10:29:00 AM AEST
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This is so full of pain and hurt
it's beautiful in it's own way, it gives
one quite a vision, Thanks for sharing
this one, I enjoyed reading it
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Prison
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by Van on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 06:20:12 PM AEST
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| This poem is about my feelnigs toward life itself. The content of the way i decribed things is the way i feel. Well it was the way i feel. I suffer from depression and i am known by a lot of people as a 'cutter'. I have tried to commit suiside a number of times. I dotn expect everyone to understand the words in the way i put them because you cant understand untill you have experienced and i pray to god that no-one has to go through what i have and am going through. Im not sure if you meant your comments to be rude or just to help add to my poems. But either way i respect your opinions. |
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