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She
Contributed by
Rxqueen
on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 09:27:22 AM in AEST
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A being so sweet
a delicate treat
If only her wall I coud break down
defeat
a smile that would light up even the darkest room
but she rarely lets it slip past
escape
her gloom
I wish I could find the words to describe
the incredible
beautiful
vibe
that eminates from voice
body
and eyes
imagine a fire glowing sunrise
over an ocean so pure
it would only make you realize
your immoralities
she is my disease
inflicting me
with her
perfection
and rejection
to touch
to feel
would be too unreel
for someone like me
like me...
she would never
could never
let it
be....
Copyright ©
Rxqueen
... [
2004-11-13 09:27:22]
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Re: She
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 09:50:10 AM AEST
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| Hey cool poem, painted some reaaly unreal visuals, and in words that flowed and danced, awesome write. |
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Re: She
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by winged on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 09:58:44 AM AEST
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| Wow, I found that really moving and powerful, a really great write, thanks!!!!! |
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Re: She
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by taryn on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 10:37:43 AM AEST
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| great write! |
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Re: She
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by Avis_Nigra on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 10:57:23 AM AEST
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| I like how you let the words fall... how you use the shape to manipulate the content, very nice read. |
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Re: She
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by kaitolyn on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:13:15 AM AEST
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i saw everything you said.
good job! |
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Re: She
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by CAUGHTinAdream on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:14:46 AM AEST
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| Yet again, great job! I loved it, and i can relate to it. Keep it up =) |
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Re: She
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 03:28:54 PM AEST
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A beautiful poem I loved how it flowed as well
as the imagery. Well written... don't let people
get you down in the forums!!!!
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: She
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by Jishes_4_ever on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 09:29:44 PM AEST
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Great write...
~!*!~hugs~!*!~
~!*!~jishes~!*!~ |
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