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Her Savior
Contributed by
thegirlwithsolittle
on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 06:55:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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she sits here all quiet and nice,
not a peep not a sound,
not a danger in sight.
Letting things happen,
however ther go,
and drifting along,
just so you know.
But what once seemed happy,
now sulking and gray,
sitting in here closet,
waiting to fall away.
Laying in the dark,
shivering in the cold,
holding the knife,
a move dangerous and bold.
Taking the time,
to delicatley decide,
where will she hide the marks,
the leftover thoughts of her suicide.
And with a jolting bolt,
a slitt of the wrist,
All the pain she once felt,
she never had the chance,
to be missed.
Her father mother sister brother,
sister mother brother father,
forgot she was even there.
Her savior and her christ,
the best thing in her life,
cost her the deadly price,
poetry of her suicide.
Copyright ©
thegirlwithsolittle
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2004-11-12 18:55:06]
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Re: Her Savior
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 07:01:25 PM AEST
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Well, where ever it came from, it's great! :-D Good job, keep it up!
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Re: Her Savior
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:16:41 PM AEST
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written well. excellent write. but im confused on this part,
"Her savior and her christ,
the best thing in her life,
cost her the deadly price,
poetry of her suicide." it sticks out to me and im trying to see how this makes sense....
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Re: Her Savior
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 10:39:45 PM AEST
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| awesome, i love it! |
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Re: Her Savior
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by Thegirlwithsolittle on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 07:31:41 PM AEST
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| i think this a really goood poem its makes really good sense...it is very touching!! |
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Re: Her Savior
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by wray on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:53:53 PM AEST
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| I like the last line: "poetry of her suicide." Very poetic =) |
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Re: Her Savior
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by cheech on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:54:57 PM AEST
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ur right... i do like...and i can relate...keep up the great work,i'll be sure to stay in tune with ya work,muh
cheech |
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Re: Her Savior
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by Apolla on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 08:18:58 PM AEST
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| This was a nicely written poem. It tells a story which is nice. |
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