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Drip, Drip
Contributed by
pixie
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Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:08:50 AM in AEST
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Drip, drip what’s that sound mummy?
Drip, drip why does daddy look so funny?
Why is he lay there in a pool of blood,
Why are you screaming that I am no good?
I only tried to help to stop him hurting you,
I am sick of the ***** that he puts you through,
All fighting, your screams & the beatings,
A fist in your face is your welcome home greeting.
Daddy didn’t think that I saw him do all this,
He thought I was in my room so my eyes would miss,
But I heard everything & my eyes saw it all,
I witnessed his punches as you curled up in a ball.
All the other kids at school have normal lives,
They don’t see their dad chase their mum around with knives,
I just got so fed up with not sticking up for my mum,
It made me upset to see her always looking so glum.
She tried to cover up the countless black eyes,
She also tried to deny all the times that she cries,
I see all the cuts that she has all over her arms,
She says they are accidents & she doesn’t self harm.
So one day when daddy finally came home,
He thought he & mummy were in the house all alone,
Little did he know I was stood behind him with a knife,
I killed him because that’s no way a man should treat his wife.
I wanted mummy to be happy & did this for her,
It all happened so quick it seems quite a blur,
I love my mum & I’d do anything to make her smile,
I’m glad daddy has gone he was so wicked & vile.
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pixie
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:18:34 AM AEST
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O_O Omg...
Ok..I dunno what to say about this except it's disturbing to see it through a childs eyes.
Pretty scary.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by cocacola1331 on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:25:25 AM AEST
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| That's really depressing... but very empowering to read it from the child's point of view... wow. |
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by screwup on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:30:04 AM AEST
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Krissie,
this is quite an amazing piece, I loved it so much. it was soooooo dark, and that's the way I like it. great job on a fantasic write.
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by Corona on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:41:12 AM AEST
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| I Really Like This One! GREAT WRITTING!! |
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by Flipped_out on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 09:59:17 AM AEST
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| Fantastic Pixie..totally absorbing and really moving wow!!!! |
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by Stitch on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 10:00:34 AM AEST
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This is quite colorful and frightening.
I'll take exception to this one line:
All the other kids at school have normal lives,
Took me years to learn that few have what we might call "normal" lives. Dysfunction is far more widespread than I ever imagine.
But, I know it's what a child would think and it rhymes well. This is a well thought out write.
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by Willofree on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 10:06:58 AM AEST
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Wow! That is a very powerful and provacative write. What a position for the little girl to be in; and the mother too.....
Very thought provoking
Willofree |
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by pander on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 10:14:14 AM AEST
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This is one of your best pieces of work to date Pixie. I just love the spin you've put on this to aproach it from a very unusual point of view.
On a scale of 1 to 10 I would give this a 15!
Stunning Stuff!
Pander
xxxx
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Re: Drip, Drip
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 07:08:02 AM AEST
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| f-*-*-k me that was good |
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