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Because He Couldn't
Contributed by
anonymous_skies
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Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 06:27:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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The child smiled and shook his head
"I don't know how to dance."
Watching her, just walking off,
"I never had the chance."
It wasn't that he didn't try
Or never struck a disco stance
It's just the music made him shy
And people laughed when he once pranced
The others always did it well
Told him he would waltz just fine
But he kept staring at his feet
Mumbling more 'next time's
He longed to glide across the ground
To twirl and sway and rock
But always ended up around
The "I don't dance"r's block
He smiled again and shook his head
Another girl, more "I can't dance,"
Trying to laugh, sighed instead
"I'll never get the chance..."
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 07:07:46 AM AEST
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Reminds me of someone I once knew. I think it works quite well in rhyme.
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by Kie on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 07:08:07 AM AEST
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Hello & welcome to YPDC.
This was refreshing to read, very well written and I thought the poem was incredible.
Keep up the good work.
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by Stoney1 on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 09:15:54 AM AEST
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I'd leave it in rhyme; it works ok.
You struck a universal chord in
young men fearful of looking silly.
It was only my overpowering need
to nuzzle up against cute girls in a
socially acceptable way which
overcame my shyness.
Let's give a cheer for the overactive
libido, lest we lose the the art of the
dance.!*g*
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by brew on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 05:13:26 PM AEST
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| Not a bad write................writes are usually not bad, because it comes from your heart.......that is what counts. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 06:27:36 PM AEST
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| awesome, i love it! |
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 03:43:10 AM AEST
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Ahh, now I've a bit of a connection to this one somewhere.
I enjoyed the rhyme. It's tasteful. On the whole, quite a good piece.
And do keep up hope. Some girls out there don't dance well either, I've heard...
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Re: Because He Couldn't
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by shelby on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 05:47:10 PM AEST
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welcome to ypdc!!
an enjoyable read brought forth nice images but..........
Im sure you can dance just fine (smiles)
art of dance is as individual as a poet with the verse just get into the moment and let it flow other words.. get out there and shake your boody!!!!
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