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My element of surprise

Contributed by travisk on Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 11:07:45 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

I'll write this one to begin with a question
For it seems such lines dominate my mental voice
I'll deviate again from my old standard rhyme
For it seems my mind gives me no choice:

Did you even notice? (my near breakdown)
When, during the sickening volume of that audio
Amongst the multitudes of dancing drunkeness
My pacing to and from the cheap liquor bar?

When you burst in my empty room when I was away
And seized my notebook of personal suicide,
Complete with a full, disturbing description of my plans,
To scrawl a simple message across the first
unfilled page?

What might you have thought of my horrible secret
Had you been in a more sober, comprehending state
Reading those final lines I wrote
Nearly eight months ago, dressed in suit and tie
With the ingredients of death laid out before me
Laid out in response to my terrible trespasses
With a girl nearly as wonderful as you

Again, I have no solution minus the fatal one
Cannot live with or without you
Won't harm you by pursuing
Yet have failed to suppress these growing desires
To love you

As well as to die.

Copyright © travisk ... [ 2004-11-10 23:07:45]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: My element of surprise (User Rating: 1 )
by Bohemian_with_a_pen on Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 02:12:52 AM AEST
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i love it, awesome

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