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Goodbye
Contributed by
cocacola1331
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Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 06:01:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Emptiness here...
in my life.
Nothing besides it,
nothing to fill the gap.
Like nothing I've ever felt before.
This excruciating pain
lies inside of me;
It won't go away...
Destroying me - physically and mentally.
Won't cease to bother me...
just calling out to me,
festering within.
Lonliness is me now,
something I never thought I'd have to go through..
I always thought of being lonely as something that
happened to 'that other person'....
'That other person' where everything went wrong
for them...
That's me now...
Me... and nobody understands it.
I still don't believe that you've left me,
it's all too fresh,
all to new.
The wounds still bleed,
still sting.
It still hurts me to think about losing you,
because I know that death is
Irrevocable.
I keep on thinking you'll walk in the door any moment,
with that familiar smile of yours...
So loving, so warm...
Gone now.
Forever.
Hard to picture your body six feet under
when I still believe you're alive.
Sometimes I face reality, and I know
you're gone...
But most of the time
I still believe.
Now all I have are memories,
some real, and some made up...
All I can think about is you,
you're even in my dreams -
alive and well,
with no sickness sweeping over you.
You're so alive in those dreams...
They're so realistic I could almost
hear your voice,
see your face,
touch your skin...
It crushes me to wake up,
all cold inside,
only to have reality crash into me...
It's cold here without you,
cold without your guidance,
your persistant kindness...
And now you're not here...
You're gone...
Life... it doesn't seem real anymore.
Everything I do just seems
so fake.
My happiness is an act.
Have I truly smiled?
There has not been a day these past months
where I haven't cried.
Cried for the love of you leaving,
cried for the cruelty of life.
I'm tired of this,
I'm so tired.
Of everything,
everything imaginable.
Goodbye,
it's time I've come to face the truth...
Whether or not I am ready...
and maybe I'll see you sometime
soon.
Goodbye for now.
Copyright ©
cocacola1331
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2004-11-10 18:01:39]
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Re: Goodbye
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by N0body on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 06:24:04 PM AEST
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*snff*sad, but very good, your a good writer.
(pst! its sara..hehe) |
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Re: Goodbye
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by n2dep2care on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 06:26:16 PM AEST
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Heart wrenching and beautiful. Brought back memories of my own. Thank-you for sharing such deep scorching emotion.
Laurie |
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Re: Goodbye
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by Silent_Storm on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 07:26:28 PM AEST
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| Wow, your poem is excellent. It's so deep and meaningful. You're a wonderful writer. You have an excellent use of words that gives the reader a glance at the emotions you're dealing with, but, as you said, most of us won't ever really know that feeling. Plus, I like the whole stream of conciousness idea. It's very original. |
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Re: Goodbye
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by EternalNight4x on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 08:53:26 PM AEST
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| Great write Katelin..veyr expressive and deep I can really relate to how you feel for difernet reasons but we've already gone over that lol...well keep writing! |
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Re: Goodbye
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 11:59:01 PM AEST
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wow beautiful write.. im sorry to hear that you lost your mom but she is in a better place now
peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: Goodbye
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by mylastwords on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 12:32:42 AM AEST
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beautiful write...so sad...i feel for you...you expressed your emotions so well...keep writing, you have a great talent...
luv xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: Goodbye
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by Deathly_Rose on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 12:00:50 PM AEST
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*tear tear* awwww omg that's such a well written poem, I love it soo much... There's nothing else to say... omg Well as you told me, it's sometimes fo rthe better to let your emotions show through poetry. And just remember I'll always be here, you've been here for the past liek 2 days for me, and I am here for you. I'm so sorry about your loss *hug*
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