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Music
Contributed by
Arianna
on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 04:24:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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She listens to the music in her room.
It sends shivers through her body while she thinks of all your gloom.
The music sounds so real like your with her here.
She cracks open her beer.
Everything used to seem to go her way.
There's no more thime for her to play.
To her the music is telling her exactly what to do.
The only thing she can think about is you.
She picks up the blade.
She's so afraid.
But she knows that it's her fault your dead.
The gun has caused your blood to drip from the bed.
She takes the blade and slides it gently against her skin.
She didn't know what she was doing then.
Now her blood is dripping from the bed.
The colors of her blood and the sheets make the darkest red.
Now all that's left to hear is the music that's being played.
Now she's not afraid.
Copyright ©
Arianna
... [
2004-11-10 16:24:24]
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Re: Music
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by alyssakoren_03 on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 04:39:03 PM AEST
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THAT Was wonderful i really liked it!!! u can write stuff like me YOur a good poet!! keep up the good work
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Re: Music
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by Avis_Nigra on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 05:21:38 PM AEST
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| I like how you sneak up on the reader and slowly reveal what is to come.. take him by his hand and don't let him go until the inevitable end... |
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Re: Music
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by sid_the_tampon_fairy on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 05:51:34 PM AEST
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Amazing. Simply amazing. I love it...very dark. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Re: Music
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by N0body on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 07:46:42 PM AEST
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| That was amazing! You're choice of words were very well written, keep writing! |
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Re: Music
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by sughy on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 09:14:24 PM AEST
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| I rated this a 5! I don't understand why people rated it a 1. Oustanding poem! I felt like I was right there watching her. Very descriptive. Keep it up! |
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